Baesch

I think I like this. It's left me a bit confused, but I think I like your premise. What I like: *intriguing story opens up to the reader. Where is ...

This was very good. You have a very expressive way of describing your emotions. Of course, I have experienced this (and isn't that "of course" a sad phrase), but my ...

Hi there Sherri, Baesch here! I'm going to work down through this and use quotes to highlight what I find perhaps a little awkward or needy of adjustment. Hope this ...

Hi Hamsa! My grandmother would have a field day if she knew I was reviewing this. She's Jewish and doesn't really understand the concept of "the internet". I really liked ...

Hi there! I'll just read and annotate what I think could do with revision, if that's grand with you. The first paragraph feels icky >here: Her eyes were stinging from ...

Hi there! Baesch here, reviewing for Rugido Sol. Go! First off, I found this extremely hard to read to the end. I think that you have a very interesting story, ...

Hi Rei! Since you mentioned a Chapter 2, I thought I'd get a foothold here and start my spree of reviews on Chapter 1. This is my first review, so ...

Hi, Baesch here! :D I overall liked this. You portray the sense of isolation that comes from a fighting parent-house very astutely, and the emotional value that you give it ...

First off, cool! Why don't you have any reviews on this? Second off, (tiny, yet annoying) grammar mistake! the blizzard tightens it's hold; Here you should be using "its" "'s" ...

Hi ho! There was something essentially charming about this poem. I think it may have been the simplicity, but maybe it was your rhyme scheme. All of these look upon ...

I really enjoyed this. It is calm, collective, yet in a way distraught as you struggle to express the lack of understanding the world has for you. I think we ...

Hello Kafkaescence (nice name, by the way). Something I found very interesting about this poem was the concept of neurology reflected in your surroundings; your surroundings a model of neurology, ...

This was beautiful, and I can't criticise it. I generally doubt whether poetry should be given the same scrutiny as narrative literature. I have one question. When you say ossify, ...

Hi there. So, I guess the beginning of this review is predictable: awesome. BTW, I only review stuff I like because the lack of motivation makes my reviews super-mean otherwise, ...

So I was checking out your stuff and this caught my eye - I'm not going to rate this as a review because it will probably just be gushing. Alright, ...