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I like the first two lines, though the last line seemed a bit clunky to me. It's a nice length.

um... is this a poem or prose? cause... you might wanna check where you put it again...

Oh, yes, I agree completely with putting a colon there. That would be better. Although, perhaps a semicolon would work, too...? Hmm. You've made me think. The second line is ...

This (Part 1 too) is really good. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more!

I actually liked the big words, though I thought some of them maybe didn't quite fit. That kind of gave it a quality of "you don't know what's going on ...

Hehe :D Sorry to stir up envy, but we had a snow day on V-Day and today. Yep. Definitely the height of my winter. And then we have school tomorrow, ...

Hehe :D Yes, I seem to have gotten that element of poetry right at any rate.

I like it, though the ending had me confused. Would you mind explaining it, or would that ruin the whole purpose of the poem?

Thanks, guys! I was having trouble getting this poem to move - I agree that it's too heavily loaded with adjectives, too wordy. I was so focused on the image ...

Have you ever read the Lost Years of Merlin series by T.A. Barron? In the in-between-earth-and-heaven land of Fincayra, they find constellations using the points in between the stars. It ...

Once again, plaigarized from Stone Soup. :cry:

Anytime, Colleen! I love reading your poetry. :D

Thanks Colleen! Wow, I hadn't even thought of fraying like fabric frays... I'd totally been thinking of the 'bloody fray' of a battle or whatever... that's really awesome that it ...

this is great. i really can't think of anything to say that hasn't already been said. i can't wait to see the revised version! as for a magazine... what about ...

Some wonderful phrases here, but the style and structure of the poem needs to be more cohesive and determined. It wanders about so randomly... to make the poem lucid you ...