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I like it a lot. I was worried as I was reading it that it was going to be one of those poems that only describes something, nothing more, but ...

The Piano I'm awed by/at how you stand with such stately grace as I brush against your rust-colored wood. Such a strange bond that my heart holds a place, This ...

Ooooh, I like this! Very neat and compact. I love the "enough with this talk of weather" line. That being said, the corrections other people have given certainly stand. Fix ...

It wasn't THAT sappy! :) I liked it alright, for all its sappiness (which you should probably cut down if you can). I especially liked the way it turned around ...

Hey TexanWriter! (I must admit, I was originally drawn to this poem by your name; I was born in Austin and lived the first six years of my life there.) ...

Hi Guitargirl! I'm with Threnody, I think this would make good song lyrics. I'm not wild about it as a poem, though--I thought it dwelt too much on one emotion. ...

I like this. A lot, actually. I love the part where it kind of turns around and answers its own question, saying that the speaker will write what can't be ...

I'm not sure I could tell someone what this was about if they asked, so maybe I just don't understand it. To me it seemed like a lot of neat ...

This reminded me of the countless protest songs in my songbook, "Rise Up Singing". Maybe it could be set to music? I'm not sure if the protest-song-influence had anything to ...

Alright. I love story poems, and this was a wonderfully haunted one where something dramatic happens. So I like the basic idea. But as a piece of writing it needs ...

Ok, I like the subject matter, and the poppy metaphor, but I think it could be brought out more, and that that would make the poem more soft and subtle. ...

Wow! I'm really impressed! When I read the title I thought it was going to be corny and cliche, to be honest, but it wasn't at all. You might want ...

Hm. I'm not sure which version I like better, actually. The big chunk you added at the end of the second draft-- Men pass by her And look her up ...

I like the essence of it a lot, and that you didn't just stick to the romantic "campfire glowing, trees rustling" stuff but also included Gatorade and trucks. It was ...

I agree with clue about the ending and guitargirl about the lack of meaning. This reads like a Bob Dylan song--like Changing of the Guard, or Desolation Row or something. ...