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Yeah, read lots of poetry... but don't copy it. I'm pretty sure I've read this before. It's fine to imitate poetic styles, but it's just plain sick when someone wants ...

Have you read Farenheit 451 by Ray Bradbury? There's just this one part in it where Faber is telling Montag that life has to have pores, it can't be all ...

I really like this. Full of images, powerfully connects with all the senses, and it stays focussed, too. The only real criticism I would have to make is that if ...

I agree with snoink, and I also think your poetry is improving noticably - it's really great the way you take people's suggestions and constructive criticism and work with it. ...

I like it. One thing especially... the first line of the second stanza... The topic is so direct that you Is so "direct" that it startled me out of the ...

Excellent, the best of yours I've read yet. I loved the format and the atmosphere, especially in the first two stanzas. There were a couple parts I didn't think quite ...

Cool choice of topic! I like it, but I'd like to here more about it. I'd add to it, include a few more descriptions of the ghost, build up the ...

It's good, but not as good as some of your others. I felt you used too many images without spending enough time on the connections between them. I'd suggest emphasizing ...

I like it. I especially like how the length of the poem matched the resignation of the subject, as well as left us in more of a mystery than a ...

I agree with Colleen. It's fine if this is a poem journal/memoir, but if you're putting it up here, you're asking for reviews and critiques, and it's out of respect ...

I agree with bubbles - beautifully written, and it makes you want to linger in it, sink down and savor the gentle, exotic places. Very memory-esque, but devoid of nostalgia ...

I think this is the best poem by you that I've read so far. It's good to see you starting with something real and concrete. Of course, I have some ...

I liked it, particularly the second stanza. The parts I didn't like were these: with the color of age - Yellow. Yellow Take out either the 'color of age' or ...

I like it a lot, especially the last stanza. The only part I didn't like was this: across open wings; tracks seen through the eye of an eagle. the last ...

Random, but nice. The rhythm is good, and the rhyming. I particularly like the first verse. I thought it got more nonsensical and less powerful as it went along, and ...