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My stuff will be in italics, kay? The brittle stones in the cree were moving ever so softly. The moss above the surfacewas turning brown as the water sarted to ...

I really love it. It makes me feel so sad, which is good. Well done! You could have also explained a bit more about the alive Charlie, and how he ...

I preferred the first chapter, to be honest. Are you gonna add anything to this? Cos it's remarkably small. It doesn't seem to be going anywhere either, so try and ...

I really liked this story. I think I've read it before but never commented on it. So now I am! I'm not gonna bother commenting on the negatives, but I ...

I love this piece, for some reason it reminded me of angels. Anyways, keep up the good work. Nothing I think you could, or should, change. It's bravo. Brilliant.:D

Hi BlueShift, I really liked this story, however short it was. I have noticed that 'hope' and 'faith' and all that is recently becoming quite written about on YWS. Anyways, ...

I see the field now with the golden sun, the kid in the grass, the blood on him. I absolutely love this little bit here. It's so sad but...lifting, sorta? ...

Hey! I really liked this. I'm not sure what to critique you on because in my opinion everything was just fine. You gave just the right amount of descriptions and ...

I've got to agree with Pudin, if you ever published a book, I'd definitely be one of the first to buy it^^ I love the way you wrote this, and ...

Wow, nice imagery^^ It really does grab my attention, the beginning is a little boring, particularly because I don't care much for the small houses or barracks. The end is ...

If people wanted to hold hands and sing "Kumbaya" in a big circle, she was not getting involved. Frickin hilarious xD Haha good work for such a short piece^^ Not ...

And nobody stepped out to listen From under the shadowy trees. The second line doesn't really fit. Listen and trees don't exactly rhyme, and if you weren't looking to rhyme, ...

Gah! I'm late once again, and it seems as if all the nitpicking has been done. So far, I think your story is pretty good. The whole almost-breaking-her-hand thing is ...

Well, you have a LOT of spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes in this chapter. I would go through it all, but seeing as you have already gotten some reviews on ...

Hey, I got your message. I really like this one. The first one was a bit too short, and this one's just fine. Very interesting. I'm not really sure what ...