Audy

Hey Spaceman, Just a few things I noticed: Scrambling to my feet I try to move away, Like a mouse no comma necessary here running away from an owl Fire, ...

Eimear, I absolutely love this, it's so very true of our time. :) I like the lyrical quality of it, and the style just reveals so much voice and character, ...

Silented, Absolutely beautiful! Skimming through most of the reviews, I think the blatant errors were already mentioned, just don't forget to go back and fix them ^^. The last stanza ...

Hey Forestqueen, I'll be your reviewer for today! The format and sound of this piece sounds more like a song than a narrative poem - it might could even go ...

I was actually not even thinking about gay rights when I read it- simply discrimination and humanity's faults in general. I think- by mentioning or alluding somewhere the specific topic ...

(these are in no particular order...) 1. The Kite Runner & A Thousand Splendid Suns by Khaled Hosseini 2. My Sister's Keeper by Jodi Picoult 3. Cat's Cradle by Kurt ...

The murky woodland began to ooze abhorrence, all in admiration for Eric’s equanimity. I have no idea what this is supposed to say. The woodland hates how Eric is calm? ...

Awe, lovely poem! Or really, it's quite a tragic poem but you've executed it quite stunningly. I love what you've done to this line: Secret, knowledge, lie because you've pretty ...

I liked this poem, it had a nice rhythm to it though it was a bit off in some places. The 'No need to drink' line seemed forced, it really ...

Hullo! I'm Audy, just thought I'd critique your piece today =D I thought this was a pretty good start! There was certainly a lyrical quality about it that I liked, ...

Hey, Elentari! Welcome to YWS, I'm Audy and I'll be doing a line by line for today ^_^ I agree with everything that has been said above. Most of the ...

Welcome to YWS! ^_^ I'm Audy, if you have any questions, need anything, just let me know. I agree with what's been said above. Some of your sentences read somewhat ...

I applaud the use of optimism in this piece, and I definitely love the message it's trying to convey :) I definitely agree with everything that was said above. It's ...

NIIICE :o I literally said that out loud after I finished reading it. I absolutely loved it! Gold star for you. I'm not much of a poet to find anything ...

All right! ^_^ I get to be the minority here and say that I completely DISAGREE with this poem. But it does a decent job of conveying an atheist's point ...