Areida

Yay! The first thing I've read all the way through and WANTED to critique all week... Firstly, a great line: The poor thing. Her mind is no match for advertising. ...

Though you and I are both well aware that I can't critique poetry worth jack, I just wanted to let you know that I liked this. Like xanthan_gum said, it ...

LOL! I think I like the jagged-ness of it, because it indicates hesitant typing while you're trying to be nice and thinking, "Why the heck am I wasting my time ...

I love this. The title caught my eye a few days ago, but I didn't get a chance to read it until tonight. I'm heading to bed now, but I'll ...

Wow... I really liked this. I thought you could have ended more strongly, with more of a resonant note, but other than that... *two thumbs up* *and pinky toe up ...

Overall, I like it. It's a touch on the cliche side, but I think you could really jazz it up if you'd put a little work into it. An infant ...

I think this poem would have done more for me if someone would have recited it to me. Since I got started on this site, I've lost most of my ...

See, I'm clueless. Until the end, I thought that Faithful was a spoon too, hee hee. But a fork might make it all the better, like Snoink said... I really ...

I like the message, but I'm not much liking the way it's written. I don't feel a rhythm, and it feels a touch abstract. I think that with more imagery, ...

I think Sarah caught all the problems I had in terms of phrasing, grammar, etc., but other than that, I really enjoyed this. I agree with Brian that you could ...

I'm sorry, but this really did nothing for me. We know nothing about these characters, and you're not making us care that one of them is dying. It moves so ...

Wooow... I like. Surprisingly, I never got confused with where they were in terms of time. It made sense to me in the last one that he was thinking about ...

I too haven't read this style before, but the whole piece was done nicely. I don't know if this is just a part of the style or not, but you ...

Ooh, very nice. At first I was a bit put-off by the beginning, since it was so bitter-sounding, but as it progressed I really got into it. I agree with ...

Very interesting, Gal. I'm not sure if you intended this as a metaphor or not, but the play seemed to double as the story of a relationship as well as ...