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  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: travel

    Hi there Persy! 567ajt for your review. I've read a lot of your work, and you may not know this but I am a big fan of your work. I ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Books

    Hi there :) 567ajt here for your review. I came across this because I liked the simplicity of your title. I've noticed that a lot of your poems have one ...

    Jun 17, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Review Re: Me

    I find this poem a bit average. I mean, that's only compared to your others. But still I think some improvements need to be made. Like, for example, in your ...

    Jun 16, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Geisha

    Hi there :) I am here to review your piece. I am 567ajt. I see you are new to YWS, so may I bid you welcome. Simplicity is shown through ...

    Jun 15, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Dramatic Re: Last One Standing - Part 1

    Hi there :) I am 567ajt, lord and master of the most bipolar material conceived. Welcome to YWS, by the way. I found your piece humorous at the start, but ...

    Jun 14, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: will you please come home?

    This is great, Sarebear. I really liked the bluntness. You have pulled it off really well.

    Jun 3, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: Musings of an Agnostic Churchgoer

    Ah, agnostic eh? I was convinced for a long time I was agnostic, and still kind of am, but I am leaning more towards nihilism. I think your exact same ...

    Jun 3, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Motivation

    Hmm. Quite...short isn't it? Not bad, just a little bit empty. I feel it could have a lot more. I find that if you elaborated a bit more, or perhaps ...

    Jun 1, 2012
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: Valley of the Shaddow

    I found this very nice to read. It had a nice flow, very much like water flowing through a valley. I really like how it looks like on paper, with ...

    May 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Carrot Bandit

    GASP! I love this! It has such a nice voice to it and- well to me- dark humour. I can't explain why, but I just laughed when he drowned. I ...

    Jan 15, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Our Planet

    I'm not so big on environmental poems. But I'll give it my shot. Overall I thought it was really good. You showed affection and warmth towards the planet, and I ...

    Jan 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Scientia

    Ok JCK. As requested I am here. First off this is insanely short. And sometimes it can be a good thing or a bad thing. Right now....I dunno. I don't, ...

    Dec 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: nothing

    I hate to be honest with you...but this is the first poem of yours I have read. I know, you were expecting me to be negative right? Well, no reason ...

    Dec 29, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Keeping To The Shadows

    Right. This is great. Just going to put that out there first, in case you are wondering, "does he like it?" Well yep. I do. Of course, there are a ...

    Dec 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Revenge of the Wolves

    This is definetely better than Twilight. It is better than any other teenage appealling werewolf/vampire thing. I am not sure if it does appeal to that market and if it ...

    Dec 14, 2011


You are beautiful because you let yourself feel, and that is a brave thing indeed.
— Shinji Moon