AquaMarine

Hey there! So, this is pretty simplistic and short. I'm assuming that this is the way you want it to be, that it's deliberate, rather than something you didn't really ...

Hey there! My main problem with this is the flow. The rhymes make it seem kind of bad, which is sad because you've chosen such a lovely subject choice! Some ...

Hey there! Ok, so the subject of the poem wasn't my favourite. But that's because I'm one of those crazily optimistic people with a brain full of candy hearts. ;) ...

Hey there! I am critiquing your newer one, I think that's the point. XD Now, my biggest problem with this is the fact that you seem to just tell the ...

Hey there! Hmm, I'm sort of iffy about this poem. You have a good idea, but there are some major problems along the way. One if the questions that you ...

Hey there! Wow! You've taken a pretty cool metaphor here and used it well throughout your poem. As people have obviously said before me, it was very nice. I don't ...

Hey there! You've chosen a lovely, but rather sad, subject here which is nice to see. What I think is a problem is the way that your rhythm doesn't really ...

Hey there! I'd just like to say that you have beautiful imagery here. You obviously have a lovely writing style and it really shows. Nice one! The main problem I ...

Hey there! Ok, so the first thing I need to point out is your rhyme scheme. It sounds forced, which detriments your entire poem. It doesn't sound right, and it ...

Hey there! Ok, so here I didn't have too much of a problem with your rhyme scheme. It wasn't especially horrible, it was actually kind of good so well done ...

Hey there! I wasn't such a fan of the repetition in this piece. It felt a little bit like it was randomly placed, which didn't so much please me as ...

Hey there! I think the biggest problem here is the mixed message that you've got going on. You want to make it so that your poem relates to the title ...

Oh, I liked this! I just reviewed your other piece, so I figured I'd look at this one too! You seem to like kind of dark subjects, don't you. ;) ...

Hey there! Wow, ok. I actually really liked this. It's a sort of strange, yet original, subject choice that totally draws the reader in. I'm still not entirely sure what ...

One thing here that kind of bugs me is the length of some of your lines. Even by just looking at the poem I can see extra long lines which ...