AquaMarine

Hey Ben! Here (at last) to review! I don't really have any nitpicks to point out. I've read the first chapter, and I enjoyed it a lot! What I would ...

Hey there! Here as requested. Ok, I'll go through some nitpicks first... "I love you mom," says a eager young Carrie crawling into her bedsheets. Eager? She's going to bed. ...

Hey Kyl! I'm listening to the song now, and it really is beautiful. I've never attempted to translate lyrics myself (not that I have a need to) but it's always ...

Right then ... Here to review! “Would you calm down first?!” He growled, angrier than I thought he might have been. I closed my eyes and sucked in a breath. ...

*snerks* Why? Because he's a sparkly vampire, dude. What's not to like? He dazzles me. :xd: On a poetic note ... I guess this is original. Although I'm sure many ...

Hey there! Rhyme wise, I actually like it. The poem is kind of cute, so the occasional forced rhyme doesn't really matter to me. You've done a nice job with ...

Hey there! So, I don't actually know Walt Witman's writing, so I won't be able to comment on how yours is like his, or not. But I think that's been ...

Hey there! It's a lovely subject for a poem, is music. Very nice. However, as June said, you're just telling us about the music. The reader wants emotion, they want ...

Hey there! I think this is really beautiful. The way you've written it, the way you've presented it, most things about it, are lovely. You've chosen everything perfectly and it ...

Hey Hawk! So, this poem was pretty good. You had a message, and it was a pretty good one. I didn't like the last stanza because you seemed to jump ...

Hey there! My problem here is that you ruin the flow with your long lines. The rest is nice, really nice, but the long lines break it up and make ...

Hey there! I will agree that the poem is kind of cliché; there is a lot you could do to make it really stand out. Maybe one idea would be ...

Hey Hawks! I liked this. It was kind of simple but powerful. I especially liked the way you'd split up the lines in the third stanza, it was really nice. ...

Hey Lydia! I actually really enjoyed the voice-mail part. It was original, and made the poem really interesting for me. However, doing it fully three times felt like a little ...

Hey there! This hasn't been reviewed yet, so I'll get on it. I haven't read the first chapter, sorry, but I actually enjoyed this one! It's got a nice balance ...