Poetry puke as a result of Minioning. *glares at Snoink*
Robsessed?
Why?
He’s just a guy.
A guy who acts, but just a guy.
Why?
He’s much too old for you
And it’s a little creepy anyway
Would you date someone you’d never met,
Who knew everything about you?
Thought not.
Why?
What is it about him?
The vampire he plays?
He hasn’t changed so much for that, you know.
Really.
Why?
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HA! I feel like telling mys sister that. She'd probably kill me in my sleep.
*Looks around nervously*
Suddenly my door busts open.
*I turn around, trembling in fear*
Standing at the door is the dreaded
*Breaks a window, and runs away, vanishing into the cold of night*
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Cheesy this was funny. Not a lot of poems are against him...I don't think. But then again I don't know if I've ever read one that wasn't against him?? Oh well, I though it was amusing and I think it made my dad but as Tiff said it needs a little work from a poetic stand point but since you weren't meaning for it to be really taken seriously it's good.
~peanut~
Oh dear, haha. My first impression of this was, "Did Grin seriously just write a poem about him?"
The ending of this is pretty amusing, but I'm not so sure if the repetitive "whys" work so well; lighten up on that, and you're good to go.
Cheers and bunny hops,
June
Lol from an amusement standpoint, this is pretty funny. From an actual poetry standpoint... err xD It could use some work?
Yes they do. Edward is real. *snuggles up to giant cardboard cut-out*
Thanks for your reviews. I should have made it clearer, perhaps, that I was not in any way taking myself or Rob seriously. I mean, who does? (That is, both of us)
Oh, and Amy? Real men don't sparkle.
~Grin
*snerks*
Why? Because he's a sparkly vampire, dude. What's not to like? He dazzles me.
On a poetic note ... I guess this is original. Although I'm sure many people have written poems about him, I doubt many of them are against him, eh?
Nice one.
I think I must be confused, but as far as poetry goes let me review.
I think that it rymed at first but it lost that in like the third line or something. It got disrupted and it really irritated me. I think if you fixed that and made it all one type of poem it would be ok. Good luck in the futute.
-Flower-
Grin!! It's adorable!! I absolutely love this, because it's so right! Rob is G R O S S.
I don't have any criticism. At all.
Love,
Fixed.