AngerManagement

Hey Nova, When you your delicate eyelashes rise. small and froze frozen Your perfect, I'm not worth it, Should end with a dot ---> . To be with you, not ...

Hey Nike, It shows a bit that you just did this without thinking because the entire scene doesn't really seem thought out. Your MC didn't really appeal to me. I ...

Hey Moo, I didn't think this looked at all like a poem. It wasn't in a layout. I felt as if I was reading a sentence or a paragraph that ...

Awww, this really made me smile. At first when I skimmed through this I was like *groan*. I thought it was long and I wasn't going to finish reading it. ...

Hey Coter, I really like this poem. The wording was really good and there was a bit of imagery. The flow was pretty easy to follow. I liked the way ...

Hey StreetRat, This seems like a very well-written poem. I didn't really like the cutesy nature of the poem. I wasn't really drawn in by the poem. The characters seemed ...

Hey Racheal, The gravel of the garden path bites into my knees, leaving bumpy, angry red patterns on my knees You dont have to say the 'On my knees' part ...

Hey Chryssa, Is you MC aquatic or human? I'm just asking because what the MC is isn't really ventured or shown to the reader. I liked the way the shark ...

Hey Carddragon, I dont think this is funny. I think its quite hard to read and Turkey Boy and Chicken Boy dont feel like real characters - they dont seem ...

Hey Babymagic, Your story is in big blocks that I think should be broken up into easily readable paragraphs. I really couldn't read anything because it hurt my eyes. The ...

where do i go from here? because let's be serious, i've I've never had any reason to move my lil tush before. always been pushhhhed I don't think It's necessary ...

Hey Meg. Unlike your other stories that I have reviewed this is one of my favorites. There isn't a load of showing instead of telling, instead there is a lot ...

Hey Mystical Blood. I liked this story and I found it quite hard to find a fault with this as it was so beautifully described. I particularly liked the end ...

Hey Tam, I was sitting at home Searching on Google I was typing and Should be a comma here. The 'A' shouldn't be a capital letter. A ll that I ...

For your first shot at short story writing this was really good. Hiding my extreme joy, I covered my grinning face with my pillow before I let out a voiceless ...