Angels-Symphony

*Well, there sits a man in the corner of the room(.) (remove and) He just wont dance to the light of the moon (S)o he just croaked cause(') if you ...

Same old faces, same old stories, same old thrills that aren't so thrilling.

*Another poem. Help will be much appreciated! Oh and in the last stanza the rhyme scheme changes. if you have an opinion of how I could make it stand for ...

This is just the beginning of my story, I've written a bundle more. I just don't want to bore you lot :smt003. So here we go. This is sort of ...

Shine bright, little baby You’re our new star, You’ll have hopes and dreams, (a)nd they’ll take you so far(.) Stay sweet, little baby Let your innocence remain(.) Take nothing to ...

Hey Kelly ^^ I'm Shina and I'll be your reviewer for today. Welcome to YWS by the way. I hate to be the one mean to you when you're brand ...

*Another miserable poem... *sigh* oh well, that's the way I am. Dark and depressing :D. Please review!* Drenched in my tears, my heart drowned in pain. (don't capitalize each line ...

It’s all but some threads on the tapestry(.) (delete these unecessary words) mangled and frayed, you laid them low(.) The insignificant ones(no comma) nobody sees(,) in the dark corners where ...

Hi! I am very new to writing poetry. I usually prefer writing novels. Anyway, I came up with some random lines off the top of my head. I figure they'll ...

Bananas Every morning, every evening* I am ready for a fruit that has smooth and soft skin. *I agree with June and believe you should mix this up a bit. ...

This poem tells how easily trust can be broken ^^ I like it. The word flow on some of the stanzas are a little bit, rough. Try picking words with ...

:!: :shock: This, was so, amazing! The ending! The second half I really liked. The relationship here however is still a little blurry. I'm not sure if they were friends ...

Shattered Shattered like the pieces of broken glass Accidentally smashed on the wooden floor. Shattered like the pieces of my heart, When you say you won’t see me anymore. Was ...

^^ I really like the imagery here and how you make the reader think. It's one of those poems that you have to read twice to get the whole picture. ...

To be honest, this was messy. I got lost, I was confused, and I just really did not know what was going on.I also think that the beginning, the words ...