Angel17

A lot of very strong imagery was created by this piece. Good work! :D

This is a poem many can relate too. I did like this poem. good work :D

This piece needs more development. There is no real emotion in the poem. A title could be 'contolled' or 'trapped'

I agree with Duskglimmer about making some lines more clear. But other than that i really thought it was well written. Good work :D

I really like it. The way we find out about the characters intentions through the person's eyes. Very good imagery too. :D

I thought your poem was beautiful and very well written. :D

I don't like the last line but the other three lines were okay

I really liked this!!! I could really feel the passionate hate you felt about the person in the poem. Very well done. :D

Very gripping and emotional. Great work :)

it was like a story. I really liked it, it was very dramatic.

The poem was going well but the last lines seemed a bit rushed

The rhyming needs more work but overall your poem was good. Needs more imagery though.

it was a depressing poem but very realistic. The last line The little girl thought that her mommy was drowning This was a strong line.

You make the poem slowly develop becoming more tense until the final few lines suddenly cool down. This was a good poem. Created a good affect.

There wasn't much imagery and didn't make me feel anything while reading the poem. try including stronger descriptions of things, it may improve it.