Angel17

This poem was like a fairy tale; a happy ending. I loved this, it was so imaginitive. Wrapped in black shroud of misery, Here in the dark I will stay. ...

you went outside as the rain came down left your car keys and umbrella at home like the night when you met me down by the banks of the thames ...

I liked and understood this poem. It was quite good. I can’t feel, I can’t touch, To do these things, Is that to much? This was the only part i ...

There was some good imagery in this. I was a bit confused at some points though. your face, a Picasso of mystery This was my favourite line, great metaphor! :D

Your poem was really good but some words in some lines were not needed. The words in BOLD are the words i think should be taken out. There she walked ...

Only one problem; you want something from me and that something is something that I lack You use 'something' too much. Find a new word to use. Other than that ...

A really sad, emotional poem. Although i think the ending didn;t seem complete. I think it was a bit too short. I was screaming in hurt I didn't like this ...

This was really good. the floodlights, the streetlights, the headlights it is beautiful, it is miraculous it is perfect This technique really gets the readers attention. I really liked your ...

I'm not sure if you need an apostrophe after 'shes'? But anyway, your poem is excellent. I think it fits in more with lyrical poetry though. I loved the rhythm ...

Great poem. This was my favourite line; the gleam of a sharpened edge, bright yet so bland. This was a very powerful line and a great ending. :)

The poem needs to be a little longer. But i liked the poem. Doubts' biting chill And passion's heat Exhaust their minds Without mercy. However this part of the poem ...

I tend to name my poems after the line i feel stands out the most. With your poem i think you should call it Sky splashed with pink, hills rinsed ...

She died in her home And no one had known Instead of the last line 'And no one had known' Maybe you could write 'She had no one' it might ...

This poem was great it really made me feel emotion while reading it. torn from me as a thief would steal a wallet I love the simile you used here, ...

The poem made the reader imagine they were in the poem Salt caked my eyelids and i struggled This was a good line. The following last lines were very powerful ...