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Black Princess
Alone in this tower far away
I pace cold halls and cry
Never do I see the light of day
For the Black Princess am I.
Here in my dark world of pain
Locked in this castle of despair
I try to escape, but alas, in vain
For I trip over things that aren’t there.
Always I have reigned here on my own
Black Princess of the land of night.
Fear and Pain they share my throne,
While nightmares on my shoulders alight.
Whispering in my ear they tell me
It shall always be this way
Wrapped in black shroud of misery,
Here in the dark I will stay.
My tears are blood of ebony
Ever dripping off my face.
Unseen fingers of ice hold me
Dragging me to a lower place.
Eerie shadows dance on the wall
As I wander empty corridor.
Screaming out but none here my call
But the bones of those gone before.
I look into an empty sky
Searching for the dawn of endless night.
As I scan something catches my eye-
A twinkling pinpoint of light.
As I watch, slowly it grows
Until it fills the whole sky.
Everything round me starts to glow
Reflecting the star from on high.
No longer I be the Black Princess,
For the black now reflects another hue.
Under the star’s gentle caress
Violet my world does renew.
The Violet Princess now am I.
Hope lives, Fear runs in dread.
Black blood no more I cry.
But sweetly smile instead.
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nice!! i really liked how it switched moods toward the end... the rhyme pattern was good but gets a little to sing-song in such a long poem... that didnt distract from it too much though. i love the way you worded this, great poem!!
This poem was like a fairy tale; a happy ending. I loved this, it was so imaginitive.
These were the best lines in my opinion, they added a real dramatic effect.
Awesome! At first, I thought it was only about a dark, mysetrious character, but I like how at the end everything went better.
Good job!