Andrea2676Marie

Very original, and there is a lot of emotion packed into these few sentences. Poems can be difficult to write, but I really looks like you put a lot of ...

The description you have here is really good. I would re-read it a few times to check how the sentences are flowing. You have a excellent word choice, and the ...

Excellent start to a story! I really enjoyed reading it. I also can't wait for more. You've got a great idea, and there is a lot of originality here. Also ...

Great idea. I love the way the story is flowing, especially the personalities of the characters. I encourage you to continue writing, and post more! You did a really good ...

Great style, and I love the way you are making the story flow. I would re-read your entry and go through some minor grammatical errors (they are so annoying, I ...

I really like this! Had me laughing out loud! You are really able to bring comedy to paper! Please continue writing, I would love to see multiple short stories about ...

I like this story. Great start, and I encourage you to continue writing. Only thing I can point out is grammar errors, but we all have those. Just look up ...

Ahh the next chapter was posted! I'm excited for the next chapter, as it sounds like it's going to be quite interesting. Packed full of great emotion and ideas. It ...

Sounding great! You are doing an awesome job at describing the situation. The details are great, keep it up! I can't wait to read the next chapter, is it posted? ...

I must say that I love the characters here. Especially the names, I think that finding good names to match the personalities can be quite tricky at times. You did ...

First off, let me say that this is good work. I like the idea, and you are doing great at making these sentences and ideas flow together. Awesome writing. A ...

Oh I really like the start of this story. Great job at describing the situations. I also think you are doing an awesome job at making these sentences flow. The ...

I really like this story. There is a lot of emotion here, and it is good writing. Some advice would be to re-read this and fix a few grammatical errors, ...

You have great style. I love the way this poem flows, and it is really original. There is so much information and feeling packed within only a few sentences. Definitely ...

Very nice writing. I love mysteries, but I have a very difficult time writing them. I really think you should expand on this story, or write more related to it. ...