Andrea2676Marie

Good start. I hope you continue this story, and I would love to read the next part. I strongly encourage you to continue writing and possible expand on this. I ...

I think you have a very unique style of writing. I enjoyed reading this piece, and I strongly encourage you to continue your writing. Your sentence flow was really great, ...

OOOOO I really enjoyed this. Your characters are developing nicely, and I think it's a great start. I hope you continue to write or expand on this, I would love ...

This is a good piece. I hope you are planning on expanding it, and continuing the story. There are a lot of places for expansion, and I strongly encourage you ...

I encourage you to continue this. There some grammatical errors, but those can be easily fixed. They are mainly with the quotations. Also, I think you should re-read through this ...

Okay, this is still heading in a good direction. I enjoyed reading this part, and I encourage you to continue. I think you might need to try adding a little ...

I really like this poem! It speaks the truth, and it is also very original. I like the flow here, and I also love your word choice. You were able ...

I like where you started. However, I really think you should re-read this and go through your sentence flow. It needs a little work. Try using more unique word choice, ...

Shows a lot of emotion. I really like this piece, and I enjoyed reading it. Also I think the idea behind the poem is really true, and most of us ...

It's a good idea. Check your spelling though! The numbers you have written here, actually need to be spelled out. Such as "nine year old", "four o'clock", etc. So please ...

I like the basic idea of the beginning of this script. I really think you guys should expand on this, and continue it. The options are unlimited for this piece, ...

The original idea is a little over-done in my opinion. Everyone has parent issues, so if you want to make a story including that, then make sure you expand enough ...

Is this going to be a fanfic? It sounds pretty similar to the Underworld series. It's a good description of where you want to go with it. However, if you're ...

You've got interesting word choice in this piece. I assume you are continuing the story? I think it is pretty good! I encourage you to continue this. However, I suggest ...

It is a good start you have here. I see a lot of room for expansion. Also, you should had some more description and detail. Make the reader be able ...