Published June 10, 2013
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Ohhh it's sad but really good.
I feel like crying
But you should take credit for yourself for making me cry
I love the topic and about how you describe the love for each other.
I really like the idea of the three lines and it portrays that love isn't always
what it seems.
Hope you write more
We, what a great poem! Not a sad poem, but a very emotional one. I like that. Love, sadness, happieness. All of these emotions can be felt while reading this lump of a poem. Real love is involves pain and tragedy , as well as passion and happiness. You show all of those key components here so well that the poem sucked me in like great dialog sucks you into a novel. Keep up the good work, and I hope to see more poems like this or by you!
~Dark
Woa Woa Wait a minute..
Your Second Line Does Not Seems Good. It looks disgusting.
But poetry does not stop you from doing that . In poetry you have the freedom to change the way of writing.
But in the last you have written 3 separate lines.
If you are writing a poem then it should be in proper stanza's and not a few stanza's of four lines and then 3 single lines.
Before writing a poem know all those stuff cuz if you dont then it can no longer be called a poem.
Before writing an ignorant review, look up what a "poem" is and realize that there are different kinds of poem structures.
I agree with carbon. Fix the grammar in your review as well...
Such ignorance. You don't seem to know the true meaning of poetry, or grammar...
Awe, this was so sad. I have to admit that I didn't see that coming. I expected her to be happy instead of feeling nothing for the person she was talking about. (Sorry, in my mind the person speaking is a girl.) It shows the tragic truth about how love doesn't always last. Even the most passionate loves can become dull and lifeless and end. Nice work, love.
I like this a lot. I like the relatability and the strong emotional connection.
That's love for you, painful and doesn't bear any fruit. Really tragic :'(
I liked the poem though and it had a lot of feelings but I felt like it ended to oon, like it was cut short. And it seemed a little dry, maybe add a couple adjectives to spice it up a bit or add to the imagrey. It was a really interesting poem
`Kat
Shows a lot of emotion. I really like this piece, and I enjoyed reading it. Also I think the idea behind the poem is really true, and most of us do not take that step back to realize what things are sometimes. I encourage you to continue writing, and keep up the good work.
And as always, good luck to you and your writing. I also look forward to reading more of your work.