Alzora

This is really well written, I like how you gave this persons' feelings in a letter. It's nice, it's personal, it's cool. 1. I agree with rebilinsilence, you should definitely ...

"Jesse." He breathed, his eyes still exploring my face. I held out my hand. "Jesse." I gave him my name. I don't really understand this, why does she say her ...

" I know your there," she hissed angrily contenmlating her next move. " I know your there," she hissed angrily contemplating her next move. He had caused so much pain.Rustling. ...

I flexed my hands and said “I guess i was struck by an inspiration to do a greater good.” I flexed my hands and said , “I guess I was ...

Hi!! Alzora here to review!! with a pink scare above the left one. I don't think you need the "left" here. skinner than she was supposed to be I think ...

Hi!! Alzora here, ready for editing!! I think you need some more background information. It's really confusing having no idea what this is about... Also (personally I like it this ...

Hi!! Alzora here to edit/review! I believe he is chosen. Do you mean "I believe he is the chosen one ."? Wil interrupted, “Well, there is no use arguing about ...

Hi Snoink!! I'm new on this website and haven't yet gotten to read/edit any of you're works! I've heard they're awesome! So, here we go! the water heater was busted ...

"Ellie, I let it on your bed." She said, a slight annoyed tone in her voice. "Ellie, I laid it on your bed." She said in a slightly annoyed tone ...

This is awesome!! I loved it, there's only one thing that I saw was wrong... Unfortunately for him, I had good hearing. this seems a little awkward. But other than ...

Wow, Hi. I'm Tanya. Welcome to YWS! I was going to do a review but I just saw the format of your chapter. First of all, it is a very ...

I wrote this in detention of all places (for my cell phone, and it's the only time I've ever been.), and this was written in annoyance to the two girls ...

Last year for English we had to write a poem based on the Love Song Of J. Alfred Profrock. This is mine, so I didn't write SOME of the lines ...

I just kind of randomly came up with this, very spur-of-the moment. Enjoy! The clock chimed two. I closed my eyes, groaning. Why did the moon have to be so ...

*Dream* "Matt! Matt please don't leave. Please." Amy Lynn pleaded with her boyfriend. She didn't want Matt to leave her, but he had to. It was for the sake of ...