AlyssaKyle

This was certainly very interesting. I happen to like Doctor Who, by the way. I was a bit confused though. If the world is advanced enough for televsion an porduction ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! As usual, I feel Galerius was a bit extenstive, but I did agree with some of what he said. The rhyming in the first stanza ...

Hey There! Welcome to YWS. I really like what you did here. I didn't even notice your lack of punctuation. However, as a reviewer I feel the need to throw ...

Hello there! I enjoyed reading this poem. You did a nice job. Stanza length was consistant, and the rhyming didn't feel forced overall. I just have some small nit picky ...

Try to keep your stanza size consistant. It helps with the flow of the poem. the same goes for line length. I got the point you were trying to display ...

Hello there, Rook, and welcome to YWS! I'm on a reviewing binge, so here goes. I like what you have going on here. However, it feels (this is going to ...

I like what you did here. I just have some small nit picky things to comment on. Your first few stanzas were a bit lengthier, but then they got shorter. ...

I was going to mention that you should keep your stanza size the same throughout the poem except for the ending if you wish, but then I noticed that you ...

I really enjoyed reading this. Typically I suggest that people keep their line length consistant throughout the poem, but in this case it works that the third stanza is different ...

Repetition is a type pf poetry, and I don't think it is fair to tell you not to do it when it is the basis for your poem. If you ...

The plot is moving along very nicely with this. The story's structure is very easy to pick out, which is important. I like the way this story is going. But ...

I thought this was really funny. I know how the narrator feels about having a perfect relative that everyone always has to talk about. Some of the rhyming felt a ...

I don't think those mistakes were garish. Everyone messes up sometimes, and I often miss my mistakes becuase I know what it should say. I liked the story that your ...

I like how you havea clear song structure going on. Its important that that is easy to pick out, otherwise it wouldn't be much of a song. I would suggest ...

I didn't find any tense problems, just some nitpicky gramatical errors that I won't annoy you by pointing out. I myslef am a golfer, so I was attracted to this ...