Ha, this was really a good one. Really funny. ^^
OK...about the poem...hmm...
When I read it, I noticed it was written in a fast pace. Maybe it's just me, 'cause I'm used to rather slow poems, but some parts confused me slightly, as angels-symphony pointed out. Some parts went woosh, some when slow. The rhyme scheme also didn't really work out for me, especially at the ending part.
But overall, it was great work. Very brightening and cheerful.
You deserve a gold star.
Have a good day, and keep writing!
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