Alvarin

Wow, I was so confused at the beginning, but now I think I got it.. Kind of xD The concept of a character that lives in a world where time ...

Hey, Fruit :) Here's the review that I promised. As short one, but I hope you'll be satisfied. I managed to spot three typo that Veeren missed (amazing, I know): ...

Hey, Peanut. I felt that I just had to write a short review about this :) I loved this and the way you told her story. It looks a lot ...

First of all, welcome to YWS, alias! I'm Alvarin and I'm reviewing today :) Since you're knew here I'm going to do it thoroughly. I noticed some minor flaws here ...

Hey Shino! Here's the review that I promised :) I'm gonna try not to repeat what the others has already said. I really liked the story. It was sad, but ...

Hi, Shadow. Alva here to review :) This review will probably pale in comparison to Master Yoda's, but there was a few things I wanted to say that differs from ...

Hello, misstoria. Alvarin here to review :) I agree with PenguinAttack about the short lines, and how it messes with the flow. I also want to point out that you've ...

Hi, CrazyGirl! Alvarin here :) Here's the review you asked for. I haven't read the other reviews, so this has probably been said before, but here I go anyway: There ...

Hi, I'm Alvarin and I'm going to review you work :) First of all, it flows really well. The punctuation is good and the amount of syllables in each line ...

Wow, this is fantastic. Barely know what to say. It kind of made my day :D Every word is simple and true, and really makes me think that I should ...

A really nice poem! :) It flows well, has a steady rhythm and paints a picture. Not a very nice picture, but one that makes you think. It both glorifies ...

It needs a bit of work, 'cause in it's current from it's very difficult to read. I couldn't read it as it was, so I took the liberty of dividing ...

Hello again. Once again the text flows well, it's easy to read. There's still some minor mistakes here and there, like 'a' instead of "an", "are" instead of "is" and ...

Overall the story has a nice flow and is easy to read. There are some mistakes, but nothing mayor. Wait a couple of days and then read it again and ...

I liked the flow in this one, but you should probably try to change the fonts or the way that you've organized the text. Putting the first three parts like ...