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Hm, I like this. I was drawn in by the title, which made me imensely curious. (I spelled that wrong. Hm. Immensly? Well, very curious.)
Then, I was kind of put off by the shaky rhytm. Most of this doesn't flow very well, so that made it hard to read.
Then again, I saw that maybe it was on purpose, since this could be written by someone who is suffered because they're trying to figure out why they can't love. Maybe the unlucky girl/guy just had an argument or something, so it would be choppy.
Once I got to actually just reading this and ignoring the flow, I loved it. It made me laugh, and there were definitely parts of this that I can agree with and have experienced.
Overall, this was nice, and a very interesting topic to read. I liked it. Of course, if you didn't mean to make it sound choppy, that is definitely something you should work on. I think I caught some typos in there, too.

Hmmm...thought it was good. You're quite the talented poet. The numbering thing was unexpected and a fresh new way of doing it. However the poem made writers sou.d slightly....odd. Not all writers are addicted(except maybe to writing) Jk. Another small problem is that its hard to understand but hey! Who really understands Shakespeare? Haha your writing is not QUITE on that level but still good. Keep up with the writing!

I never encountered poem of this kind before, the numbered listing-style captured my attention as if this was written by an article writer (like me). Firstly, I love this part;

"

we know ourselves very well

and you do not

you are a lengthly investment and

probably,

aren't worth the effort

(we have imagined this before)

(we have worded it before)

we know better

"

Simply because you perfectly pictured out what majority of us are.

NOW My verdict for the entire poem.

I had to re-read this before I could figure out the sense of the verses. End up that the message of this piece is made to introduce the traits of most of "us." Well done.

Something about this is fascinating. It's hard for me to focus on your specific word choices and give criticism because I am totally absorbed reading it. Grabbed all of me. Very well done.

There's something about this poem that attracts my attention, besides the title, the way you explain the reasons of a writer for never loving someone back. Let me explain myself better. You give us a sort of unexpected, more darker side of a writer and to me that is quite fascinating and I believe it might be true in certain points. This poem reminded me of a saying by Elbert Hubbard, quote: "He who does not understand your silence will probably not understand your words". I'll tell you why, the first reason explains this quote easily to me at least. Overall, this poem is quite lovely and to tell you the truth if they told me to choose between writing and love I would pick writing.
Btw, Welcome to YWS

Hey there, Alias! Isha here to review~

Well, this is a slightly intimidating piece to any non-writer who wishes to fall in love with someone who does write. And judging by the fact that it's rather well-done, I'm almost a little worried for any poor, non-writing souls who stumble across it and assume it true for every single one of us (which is, by the way, a compliment). c;

Now, your first two lines.

there are nine reasons why a writer will never love you (back)

and this is one of them.

(impending)a(crushing)l(burning)o(draining)n(hurting)e(inevitable)

First of all, welcome to YWS, alias! I'm Alvarin and I'm reviewing today
Since you're knew here I'm going to do it thoroughly.

I noticed some minor flaws here and there, so I'll begin with that.

o.
There are nine reasons why a writer will never love you (back),

and this is one of them.

i.

We've never said exactly what we've meant -

and we know it is useless

to start now.

Instead we scatter g a_p...s in our

tongues, like punctuation.

We expect you to read between the thoughts (either , or .)

you're not good enough if you can't

hear our meants

ii.

we will always love a strand of music

a quote, or a word...

iii.

...

you are a lengthly investment and

probably aren't worth the effort

...

v.

we are brats, and selfish and

being artistic is leave to

claw out of our lives.

vi.

you will never make us feel less

(impending)A(crushing)L(burning)O(draining)N(hurting)E(inevitable)

but we will make you feel exactly

precisely,

like us.

worthless.

ix.

you might be able to give us love,

but all we will give you is something

that doesn't make sense

I'm not hot-shot at poetry, so I can hardly offer a proper review; all I can say is that I really liked this, and that it bridged on that wonderful line between understanding and mystery that I love in pieces like this. The subject matter was strange and captivating, your phrasing unusual and delicate, and together it contributed to a somewhat eerie piece that I found very enjoyable. Good job!

I am so glad to see you're already dishing out quality reviews in the poetry forum. And I want to welcome you by tackling this big piece of somethin' somethin' you've given us to chew on. I will do my best to do it justice.

The first thing you have to be careful of in a long and spread out list like this is repetition, and I can catch some of that for you right now!

we've never said exactly what we've meant -

when we say we love you

we will mean something

very different,