Alice

It's a wonderful thought and all, but as a "short story" (As I am assuming that is) its really bad . It's written wonderfully and all, but it would do ...

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1) spell check 2) Why did her paper catch fire? 3) Well that ending didn't resolve anything did it? 4) Details, expansion, all that happy stuff 5) What about Will's ...

I disagree Claudette, it is a Haiku, and they're supposed to be mysterious like this, and short, they are only seventeen syllables right? Its kind of inspiring, to me at ...

A boy was looking around his classroom ignoring the lecture about the economy and the law of supply and demand. Akward, starting it the way you did rubbed me the ...

Doesn't seem very poetic, but (since I love rock n' roll) I liked it. It seemed more like a freestyle for rap, which kind of defeats the purpose of the ...

Naval grazing, I liked the concept but I was confused! What's going on? What are you talking about? Who are you talking to? Why are you writing this? It sounds ...

Blood and chocolate doesn't have a plot for a movie, and I admit as well, if I had to chose, I'd pick the movie. They picked really cute actors, and ...

Alright taking on the qualities of my English teacher I will now scold you like she would scold us. Don't use the word you outside of dialog!!! Second person tends ...

dream.This dream you need a space there. and again too short, if you're trying to make it easy for us to read, don't. Post you whole chapter, or half your ...

Only one sentence didn't start with "she" it made me wince. (sorry it did). Its also rather short for a prologue, so I didn't get what was going on. But ...

[quote]outside, but to those involved band is life.[quote] Unfinished thought. Whoever your character is, I sympathize with them, I am in band myself and it would kill me to have ...

Okay Snoink once again you've made me smile, but thats not good today (my face is sunburned) I couldn't stop laughing when I read this, it just sounds like one ...

Strangely I found nothing wrong with the prolouge. applying pressure to some unmentionable areas. I just love that. “The profile was right, but you’re a lot hotter in person,” that ...

tighter Should be tighten. Thats the only problem I could find with this, and I have a good eye for these kind of things. That doesn't seem like a seven ...