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Alright, I didn't read it all, but I read towards the crash and after he wakes up with his wife by his side. I have a few things I'd like ...

Act I. I read this as best I could with eliminating structure. My end conclusion was that the sentences are a little strange and we're talking about something which doesn't ...

Using a line like "this poem is short" is kind of strange to me because I don't often write about writing, so I'm going to take a little different method ...

This poem definitely has a pace about it. I would almost like to see you take more time with each image that you build, or only build one image in ...

This is an intriguing image with the narrator being a part of the people who seem to be worshiping this female. It is a little preachy because everyone is seduced ...

All of these rhymes are really starting to fog the images that were trying to be created. I would strongly suggest getting away from this 4 beats per measure structure ...

Below them, there was a long bridge under a green pond. If you're going to tell us there is a bridge under a pond, please give me an actual image, ...

I am having a hard time getting into this story. Personally I think it needs a better hook. The writing was a little slow with all of the commas in ...

Hello~ I was told to look at your work for couplet comprehension, so I am reviewing your work >3 I shall now begin. My Main Problem: first stanza focus-So for ...

I would really love to see more about this moment. I would like you to paint a picture for the reader about a few things, basic W-questions ^^ Where was ...

I find this intriguing because of the simplicity of the poem. I would think that something with this much emotional context would require more, but really I think the heart ...

I think you have a great poem here for telling a story and pulling the reader through the whims of your mind. I like how sing-songy the poem is even ...

Ok, I can pick a few problems with this poem for you

You should put something up

Overall this story seems a bit strange because of the idea of this man in the mirror not being the man who is seeing him. Is there a fantasy element ...