Aley

This poem doesn't use new creative language. I felt that it was very predictable, high, sigh, lie, to clay, today, away, decay, etc. These rhymes are nothing new, nothing exciting, ...

This poem could be condensed. I understand that it is a dream, and I appreciate the very Dr. Seussian rhyme pattern, but it carries the reader too far away from ...

Alright, so this is the second poem of yours I've read and I'm beginning to think that the whole keyboard thing at the beginning of the poem is a technical ...

Hi there, I'm Aley and I'm here to give you a review. First thing first, I was really nervous about reading this poem because I could see the end of ...

This is a really interesting take on a house's perspective. I didn't really understand how this was working at first, but in the 5th stanza, I began to finally understand ...

Having the structure scattered like this is really not helping the poem that much. It does create interest visually, but there's not enough of a reason for the visual aspect. ...

This is really pretty. I love all the imagery. It really makes me think of a parrot who's been in the same family for years and will outlive it's owner. ...

I think this poem could use some condensing. The basic outline is that the speaker is heading for their death. They are close enough that they can see the ditch, ...

This poem is really strong. When I was reading it I had a little bit of a hard time discerning whether the italics were actually happening or thoughts, but it ...

This poem is very showy. I feel like I would get more out of the idea of the title if we actually heard and saw the quarrels taking place. If ...

Good use of the dashes. I'm glad to see you're not using "..." and that you understand the use of "quotations" when you're doing long dialog. Watch your use of ...

This is a really beautiful poem. I like the sentence structure, how it's broken up, and the overall picture that it paints, but I dislike how you used your capitals. ...

It's = it is. Its = Possessed by It. The world, = proper placement of comma. The world , = improper placement of comma. till = a verb to dig ...

You used for three times in the first two lines. It was bothersome. This first stanza really does seem very repetitive. I would suggest trimming out unnecessary things, such as ...

In the heart of tearing it to bits I shall do my best