Alainna

:D Dialouge!!! YES!!!! I liked this a lot. There is something missing though, I'm not sure what...maybe it's suspense or something. I'm not sure. But I'm positive that this will ...

Hey JC, I'm liking this, it's good that you acknowledge the fact that it's slightly cliche. I like your descriptions, the bits with the rooms were good. It was a ...

This is great!!! You made the right move, changing the genre you write. I think you can pull it off really well. Jon is molding into a fantastic character, especially ...

Ooooh...... Argh, Luke is evil!! Robs back!!!! I loved this Meevs, I really did!!! Only thing is, if Luke wasn't gay would he really be that forward?? I mean you ...

I really like this Jules. I'm glad that you've started writing in a different style, it works well. Clouds were flitting over head in the strong wind, but here in ...

WOW.........WOW...........WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D I love ice cubes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D I was waiting for that kiss to happen, literally on the edge of my seat!!! I like the way they ...

Things are looking up for Jamie!! This is a great piece, JC. Your writing has improved so much and you've really gained a knack for the whole court room stuff. ...

Yay, 27!!!! Well, this was great as usual! I'm glad that there is some action in it. I cautiously made me way #my# When the time came I stood up ...

"I had sex with Alan" I'm glad that you put this in like that. Sometimes subjects need to be dropped in at random because it seems more real, more believable. ...

Hi JC! Well done with all the research, your re-write is looking really good! I'm going to try and read all of this in the correct order and stuff but ...

This was a good idea, however I think some (not all) of the rhyming ruined it. Sometimes I felt like you were 'rhyming for the sake of it'. Maybe just ...

First off, this was very good. The concept was spot on and you grasped the idea very well. However, as write me said I think that putting this poem into ...

I've finally caught up!! Yay!! This is going fantastically well. Your writing is sooo hooking; well done. To improve: It was the nurse from the last time she had been ...

This was good but as pointed out before it's a tad unrealistic. I have a few tips though as I take part in the Mock Trial competition and even though ...

Fab chapter!!! Becca is sooo annoying!!!! Argh!! And what is going on with Rob?? Stand up for Jaimiy for goodness sake!!! I felt. Empty. Instead of a full stop I ...