Aedomir

Very interesting to read! I really liked the way that you didn't say whay people were dying outside, and the way the scene just skipped between the first two. She ...

Wow! Even though I am a fantasy writer, I find such novels difficult to get into sometimes, but not this. It looks brilliant, and I see potential steaming through it. ...

I don't care what other people say, I think this is really good. I think what Jezza meant was that the style appeals to him. Now I've read it, I ...

Hi Jezza! So I couldn't really critique your work at my house yesterday, so here goes... OK, its difficultt to tell what's going to happen to here, which is wht ...

I really don't need this kind of competition lol. Just a quick look... The two embraced in the dark room, her father bumping the two of them against the cabinets, ...

Hi, I've had a read through, and nothing major hit me really. I thought your description of the tower was a bit difficult to understand - it doesn't flow very ...

Hi! I thought I'd return the favour: When I read this, I was stunnned by how good a writer you are!!! Serioulsy, you would give thousands of proffesional writrs a ...

Hi. I like where you're going with this, but I just have a couple of thoughts. #1 After the first few paragraphs, there is not a lot of narrative. This ...

Ok, let's go! “I am not human.” Her words rang in his ears. “I am not alien.” He still stood at the doorway, the door he had slammed in her ...

Hi, nice to meet you. Just a grammar issue that I picked up on: I think [s]there are[/s] a few customers in the back didn’t hear you.” I thought that ...

I think I will read your piece and comment as I go along - I'll start with problems first... the song innocently continued. and "Blackbird?" She guessed innocently. Try a ...

That was a very well-written, amazing yet serious and humourous all the while! I just summed it up there! I didn't read the first part I am afraid, but I ...

That was very good, suspense-packed piece, with just a bit of criticism: You used 'Earth' and 'People from earth' too much. Earthlings is good, but there only 3 terms for ...

All the mistakes have been found I see, but apart from that, I really like your style. That was a very cute piece, quite sad in parts as well! As ...

That is the type of Romance novel that I would buy. The pace was perfect and I found myself beginning to fall in love with your characters! The start was ...