Abigail_W.

I must say, I'm rather confused. Isn't it fun to "chase that glittering rainbow in the sky"? If "life is such a bore", how can it be "for the good ...

Hi Tanith14! Firestarter just about summed it up. I just feel like I need to point this out to you ... St. Peters pearly gates would lose the hue St. ...

This was purely wonderful. Your rhyme scheme and flow were immaculate, your punctuation was flawless. I tried and I tried to find a mistake, but not one was evident. The ...

Hi Fiction! What are you talking about? You're not bad at poetry. :pirate3: First things first, though, I have to go through and clean up the technical stuff ... No ...

Hi Haileyanniful! I like this a lot. It's short, though not exactly sweet. I have a couple suggestions for you ... You use a lot of commas. I might go ...

Hi there! I love love love love love love love this! I love how it was told. I love your voice. And most of all, I love the last two ...

You are going to post more of this, correct? I mean, you must post more of this! My main question is: do the characters' names have anything to do with ...

Well, CaptainRandom, Firestarter just about summed it up. (Your icon is unbelievably awesome, by the way.) I shall go through and fix your mistakes in red. It was a time ...

Hey there Samiam. I have tell you, that is an awesome username! :smt003 The ground is clustered by stereotypes . Like landmines ready to explode, getting my head ready to ...

Howdy, Kitrosemon13! Well, Firestarter has pretty much summed up the problems with the conflicts in this poem, so I'll fix up the technical stuff ... Open rooms with shattered glass, ...

To post all of this novel, go to the Advanced Critiques forum and post this as an attachment. Heres the link ... Be sure to read the instructions before posting, ...

Yola Caerauboy, and welcome to the magical land of the Young Writers' Society! Vast beauty like moonlights reflected on sea, Ripples of lights and rains droplets, A strange swell a ...

Hiya Persephoneia! I like this! I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before, but welcome to the Young Writers Society! My one recommendation is that you change the fourth line ...

Hiya Retrodisco666! Well, I appreciate the point of this poem, though I'm not saying I agree with it. First of all, who is your audience? Knowing your audience is important ...

Hiya Retrodisco666! I agree with JasmineHart on most points. Your lack of consistent tense is definitely the main problem in this poem. My skin is torn, salt in my pores, ...