ANADIR

Breaking Benjamin? XD I'm listening to that right now! (I will not bow) I'm not really a poet, so my feedback may not be too useful. Your rhymes seemed to ...

Breaking Benjamin? XD I'm listening to that right now! (I will not bow) I'm not really a poet, so my feedback may not be too useful. Your rhymes seemed to ...

Wow, this is great! :) I wanna read some more.

Wow, this is really nice! I wish I had more time to review this! After taunting me with this, you better join the competition now! :P

Wow, that was great! It really captured how you feel, and it kept flowing well. I am no professional at poems, but I am glad I invited you to the ...

ack, that must be a typo. sorry... :P

Fairy tail? I got the beginning and some of the names from a friend, so that must be where he got it. lol

Thanks! I hate to break it to you though, but this has absolutely no help from harry potter. :P Well, I guess you could argue that going to a "Magic ...

:P thanks. how exactly would you work on the bad guys voice? other than editing of course. :P

Lol, this is not even close to done. I just finished the book, and am now posting the chapters. There about 15 more chapters. Don't fret :D

lol

nice poem! I think you could become a great poem writer!. never give up on your work. if anybody every tells you that it is pointless, or you are bad ...

Thanks for all the wonderfull support guys! I will take into consideration all of what you have said, and try to update my chapters to more expanded ones. thanks! -andy

thanks! I will work on that as soon as possible. by split my dialogue up, do you mean that I should add words between? or put in more "Lance said" ...

Thanks! that rewiew was really helpful! I agree that it was rushed, as I get farther into the story, it slowly gets better. I will work on fixing this, as ...