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this looks like an amazing start for a story! just a few things. in the intro paragraph, it seems completely different from the beginning of the story, so you MIGHT ...

that is a very interesting story! I only found a few small problems. first, the story didn't make much sence in the beginning, but it became much much better at ...

Awesome start! I would have liked it a bit more if you had described a bit more about both the main characters, and the bad dudes. also, it would be ...

Amazing story! I didn't find many ggramattical errors, or even a single one! I noticed that you also did great on keeping space after your words, which I have problems ...

looks like Gloria is in trouble! :P Another great chapter! but as I said in the last one, you might want to flag it as mature, there are some cusswords ...

Another great chapter champ! just a few things. 1. when you switched in one of the chapters, it was sort of freaky, like first he was digging, and then he ...

0.o. that was a nice piece of poetry... but it was slightly...graphic? I think the poetry itself is amazing, accept for the last line of the first paragraph, to me ...

...what a beautiful poem. I am extremely sorry for your loss. While reading this, I hold back tears, thinking of what could happen to my grandmother. May the Lord guide ...

That was not rough or pathetic. Even though it was written very long, and it took me a while to read, it was a great poem. I think, if you ...

Nice writing! in the beginning, though, you seemed like you were just trying to take up a little space. but other than that, the book as awesome!. you should definitely ...

Beutafull poem. I think it is very inspireing. keep writing these awesome poems. I think, that this could be an amazing role model for people who feel bad about themeelfs. ...

What a well written start! I noticed very few grammatical errors, and it seems like it could be a wonderfull book. I love the way you introduced the characters, and ...

This is a beautiful poem. I will be copying this, and giving it to my friend in school who feels very badly about himself, because he has a bad genes ...

This is an amazing continuation! Your words flow very smoothly and your work is not rushed. In fact, it gave me inspiration for my own book which I am currently ...