2001cvs

Great job for a first work! Spelling: just one little thing, third to last line, you have"kows",it should be knows. I would reccomend you use some spacing to speperate your ...

Alright, review time. First paragraph: a lot of sentences are started with the word "I" it makes it sound choppy, try to start different sentences with different words, make them ...

First of all, nicely done. Very nice. I have a suggestion or two, you may do with them what you wish. The words singing is spelling wrong every time you ...

Review time. Warning: I am feeling blunt right now and have a ton to say. Love the ryrhm you established, it's float and pretty and makes good sense with the ...

Hmm. I will get to the point. There was a little disjoint between the stanzas, it didn't seem to be one continuous flow. I understand some of the messages given, ...

My little bit. I agree with the others, the teen age part is a little odd. Switch the word age for years and I things it will come out smoother. ...

Review, beware I am brutally honest. I enjoy this, I relate a lot becuase I try to remind myself constantly that happiness is a choice- and it is! Well done, ...

Ah yes, this is sweet. Review time. Good start, simple and to the point. There are punctuation errors, however. At the beggining of ever line in powetry you should begin ...

Alright. Let's get down to business. Overall, good plot, good structure. I like the way we see the problem, and we can sympathize with it. Criitisizm: Punctiration. This can be ...

Good good. I felt like the main idea is expressed very well thoughojt this, just a few minir changes that I would suggest. Punctuation: at the beggining of every line, ...

First of all, I'd say it's a great story! Ending is by far the best, although there were a couple things that struck me as odd, and I will be ...