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Very good! It has a good flow, eve n if it sounds a bit monotonous. I didn't find any mistakes, but still something could slip. I could see the feelings ...

hey there! I liked this. i think you should post all the story like when and how they met, how they fell in love. You should give a more detailed ...

Hi! As Cat has said welcome to YWS! (short time ago she was saying it to me LOL) Anyway, I liked it! :D it cute and straight to the point. ...

I liked this idea. The definitions to start where a good touch. I liked her point of view, Lauren. The girls at school always gossiping and inventing rumours (I honestly ...

LOL I agree with you! he made a reasonably good review! There must be something wrong... Anyway, I liked it. I think you described it well because I think (and ...

Very well written as the others have said! I must advice you to something: writing about things that you don't know much about or didn't experienced may be hard. I ...

as the others have said you should improve a little bit your grammar. Anyway, I liked it but it really did sound a bit rushed. It was very deep. And ...

Hum... interesting. It really hurts when a friend lets you off like that, doesn't it? Anyway, I liked it. it flow well and rhymes were good. I didn't find any ...

Ok... I love depressed feelings poems! I write too. I mean if I feel this way how can I write happy poems if I'm sad? Anyway, this isn't about me! ...

Hi! :D I really like this, it's a great start. I'm not sure if I like Julian or not LOL his attitude pisses me off a little but i think ...

i liked it... a bit disturbing, but hey I know how you fell [:D] I support the idea above of rhyming alive with something else (it seems hard i know, ...

Loved it. As mizz-iceberg has said, I thought it could be a bit boring because the description was "last kiss" and that's a very common theme (I should say). it ...

Ok... I liked it ! My favorite part was: And my choice if death is on my side [shouldn't it be: And my choice is, if death is on my ...

I liked it. Your first attempt was definitely a success and I think the second might be too! It's a shame you won't be able to write so soon, because ...

WOW!!! OMG!!! *too exited, heart beating too fast* I think the ending was great! it surely does make room for a sequel! OMG! The ending did not suck! it was ...