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I think you do a nice job with descriptions, and giving the overall story a decent flow. Your characters seem believable to me, which is good.
Really good. But I would re-read it again to yourself. There were a few words in the wrong place...Might want to check over those. It made it a little confusing...
Can't wait to read more!
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Really liked it. Found nothing to point out, I guess. (I was reading really quick--I'm short of time). Keep writing.
Nice. I can't wait to read more. The only thing is, make sure you connect the stories. Everything did go well. This one wasn't as long, so that's good.-jeni