maybe i'm obsessive
maybe i'm possessive
maybe i'm way too overprotective
maybe i'm pathetic
maybe i'm dramatic
maybe i'm way too much for you...
say, say, you are mine
if you don't love me, i'll break your spine
wait, wait, no, you're running out of time
if you don't love me, i'll run crying
what can i say?
to make you stay?
oh no, no, don't go away
i want to ruin my lipstick on your pretty face
run, run, pretty boy
in every life i'll always choose the bear
darling, pretty boy
would you let me chain you so we'd last forever?
why, why, won't you admit?
you love me but you won't commit
why, why, won't you show it?
because all you say is a load of bullshit...
what do i check?
was i a bet?
oh no, don't make me upset
i wanna trail kisses down your pretty neck
but all i am is lonely in a world of people
where skies darken and birds don't soar high
all i want is someone to sit by
me.
so why don't you come over and let me see
how beautiful the world could be
why don't you come and set me free
tonight...?
come here, pretty boy
i didn't mean to scare you away...
my darling, pretty boy...
i just want someone to stay.
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i haven't written a review before so i'm going to try
i loved this poem so much and i really liked the concept
the repeating words in some lines was an aspect i really liked.
i noticed sometimes you would rhyme the words and sometimes you wouldn't, I'm not sure if this was on purpose or not, if it was, i found it a bit confusing but i think it still works.
the main idea or theme was very different at the end than from what i got in the beginning, it still worked though.
overall, i really liked really liked reading this poem and your style of writing. there were some lines that hit really hard for me personally like "would you let me chain you so we'd last forever" and "was i a bet" and i can't read more of your writing.
this probably isn't long enough to be a review, i'm going to find out. but still can't wait to see how your writing changes and grows c:
Woahhhhhhhhhhhhh!🤑
The rhythm is absolutely amazing, I love it!
This is so deep but yet so real.
I can really relate to this poem, I see the amount if effort u put into this.
My favourite line would be: "was a I bet?"
Also nitpick u should put a capital I not a lower case one!🤑👌
THANK YOUUU SO MUCH!! yea i probably forgot ToT