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by vanillavelvet13


(This is a work that I've been having trouble with mentally.
This poem is something that's semi-dear to my heart. 
I wanted this poem to make the readers feel emotions 
emotions from their own experiences and I think I tried too hard lol
Tell me what you think! ^v^~~)

S O M E T I M E S.
by: vanillavelvet13

Lost my balance in the abyss of wonders
Creating heaven, broken down by pieces
Slowly, I retaliate from the depths within
I break, and break, free from your touch.

My heart’s still shattered,
I thought I’d never find anyone to help me build it back
I tried to build it yet its too fragile, till you came
I thought you’d help, you did, but you broke it

My thoughts are shattered everywhere
Broken dreams, Helena can you save me?
Even though a white horse can’t save me now
Maybe you can find me and bring me back?

I'm drowning in the pit of the abyss
Slowly retaliating yet I kneel in the middle of the fight
I tried to stay alive, yet it just keeps on coming
So... will you save me?

As I walk, I realise how much I wonder if anyone could spare me
Yet I wonder how much power I actually hold
So I run back into the abyss
I’m coming stronger and better than ever before

Overthinking came back
What if I was wrong? What if I was hallucinating?
Is this all real? Are you... mine?
Or is it just an illusion and I’m fooling myself?

I wandered around the darkness and fog for a while
Till I saw another traveler walk by
Turns out they were searching for me for a while
Should I come by and see what they have in mind?

Walking, I talked and talked with the nice traveler
He seemed really nice and really collected
But as time passed, I found he was the opposite of the coin
Even if he was nice and collected, is it worth the risk?

The risk was simple, yet
Might I have found the person opposite to you?
The person whom you might find irritating?
Even though that person is clearly me...

As I grew up, I liked the thought of not having an opinion
Sticking to facts, as its less problematic
But now that you’ve shown me new colours
Shall I change my perspective to something original, mine?

There must be some other person you like
Another person that you take actual interest in
For I can’t handle breaking the love I have now
So I hoped that night for you to have a lover

Yet... might I be the love that's just temporary?
Was I just a temporary replacement for you?
Am I just a pawn in a game you gave up playing long ago?
Or am I truly the love you’ll want to spend the rest of your life with...


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Mon Apr 12, 2021 7:24 am
vanillavelvet13 says...



I had a friend read this to me and it sounded more depressing than I ought it to be T~T I'm so sorry!! XD




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MirrorOfTheSun says...



This contains a bitter-sweet truth in it! I loved it!






Thank you!! <3



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YourFriendQuirks08 wrote a review...



Oh wow...that hit close to my heart.

Living with that ongoing sadness, breakdowns and anxious overthinking, that hit quite hard. Your writing ability is amazing, the fluidity is gorgeous and the message was so clear I had to fight back tears.

Your vocabulary and punctuation is exquisite, one of a kind as well as very well placed. Remember if you ever need to talk then my PM's are open. Living with this too I think that I could help if you ever needed a chat!

Love Rubes :)






Thank you so much for your review! I really adore it, it made me smile, thank you so much!! <<3



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ForeverYoung299 wrote a review...



Hello! Here for a review!!

Recently, I am reading the sad poetry a lot which breaks me into a thousand parts! The same applies for your poem. Love in itself is one of the most fulfilling as well as one of the most hurting feeling. The poem described how you were hurt when the person you loved or maybe love left you. It portrays how that person helped you with many things but when that person left, what effects that had on you. It portrays how a person can change a whole life.

Overall, it was a very good one. You are an excellent author. Keep it up!!!

~Forever






People really do have an effect on you when you let them XD! Thank you for your review!! <<3




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