Young Writers Society

Hello friend As always, I am stopping by to leave a review on another amazing piece of yours! Halloween is my favorite holiday, so this caught my attention right away. Let's jump into the review!

Silence dressed as a doll

Malik dressed as a witch

The two friends went off to get some Treats, not a Trick!

You did a great job, setting the scene right from the start. We are quickly introduced to both of our characters and their appearances. Then we set up the scene as well. We see that they are both friends and that they are going trick-or-treating… Hoping to get treats, and not tricked. To me, the seams to give some sort of foreshadowing that they are going to get tricked or something bad is going to happen in the end.

They felt like they struck gold!

They ate up their cake slices, oh, they were so bold!

All was fine and good

Till Silence screamed, her throat felt like wood

Malik cried, he shivered at the sight

They became the monsters they dressed as in Halloween night!

I think that first line was my favorite. I like how you use the line "struck gold". That is such great line to use! Both of the friends think that they had found this amazing treat… This beautiful cake. But in the end, it seems like something was very wrong with it that ended up making them turn into monsters! They turned into the people that they were dressed, as, which I suppose means a doll and a witch. What a big twist!

So, in the end, they turned into what they dressed us. I feel like this has a deeper symbolic meaning, in my opinion. I like how you use Halloween as an analogy. In my interpretation, maybe this means that if we spend so much time, pretending to be someone or dressing like someone that we aren't, eventually, it rots who we are on the outside and makes us turn into that evil thing. Overall, I love this! Great job, keeping it really simple and fast-paced, which is something that I really enjoy. I hope to read more in the future. Keep reading!

Your friend,
Ellie