Eerie from the graves

Hey there! I thought I would stop by and leave a quick review for this lovely piece of yours. Let's jump right into it and not waste any time!

Long ago, on Halloween night

In a time before TVs and cell phones came about

Right from the start, you really caught my attention. I like how you really set the scene and build up this image and tone. Right from the start, I can tell that we are reflecting on something that happened along time ago. As you say, there are no TVs or cell phones yet. So I can imagine that this is a very old time.

Eerie was created

Eerie is the magic of Halloween

Eerie is the fright of Halloween

Eerie is in your closet

Eerie is under your bed

Eerie lives in your head

This was really cool! I love the repetition. This is one of your songs that I would absolutely love to hear performed. I like the repetition of the word eerie. Is that kind of thing where you hear it so many times that you really start to understand what it's saying. I like how you talk about the creation of eeriness and you list all of these different locations that I can be. I like that it is in one tangible object, instead, it seems to be something that inhabits people places that are important to you or that should feel safe. Lastly, I like how you mentioned that it lives inside of a persons head. That gives a very creepy feeling to it.

Before she fades to dust

October Thirty-First is her day

She’ll dance in the dusk

I like how you reference it is "she" and we start to get more of this understanding of a physical being. You do a great job at building up the suspense, and countdown to Halloween. It will be her day. This gives a lot of suspense, as well as leaving out some information so that we don't know everything, but we know enough to get this creepy feeling inside. October 31 will be her day, I love that statement. You also did a great job with the imagery here. Talking about how she will "fade to dust" and "dance in the dusk".

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this one and I can't wait to read more. Have a great day and keep writing!

Your friend,
Ellie

Hi theree girlipops!! ^^
Heheh..

How is thy on this fine stormy day?
If I may not to intrude, shall I humbly have your ghastly hand in a review?
Thank you ever so much!! Let us stride into a ghoulish ball, shall we?
First of all, from what I read, I love the idea of Eerie-she seems like an original and interesting character!! I’d say include more in-depth physical description of her too though-it would feed my curiosity and interest haha but really for the piece the amount of detail you included on her was probably perfect. But mainly, I would have loved if you included more interesting vocabulary like;
translucent, foliage, bloodcurdling, phantasm
It would have made the poem slightly more enjoyable and engaging!! Other than that, it’s unique and creative!



I love your concept of how Eerie only comes out at the night of Halloween-she’s the little, playful mascot of spoookinesss. She sounds almost cute but my imagination is taking over especially how I always choose to write reviews at night…
T^T
The descriptions are so cute~

“ She is everywhere and anywhere

Eerie, oh Eerie

So playful and creepy

Come along, come along

Let’s have some fun!

Halloween comes once a year!

So play with Eerie while you can! “

The end makes her seem quite fun and childish whereas the start made my spine shiver a bit.
The contrast is great and descptions too! Thank you for posting such a delightful read and good night/evening/afternoon/morning!<333