Where the wind blows

by theLockedLibrary

Published August 8, 2011

In Poetry

Spoiler! :
And yet another poem by me. It's a pretty simple piece. And it reminds me of a child's poem :mrgreen: Hahaha, I guess it's because I was feeling very rhyme-y today. Tear it apart if you want. ;D


Where does the wind blow?
I’ve always wanted to know
Where on Earth does it go?
Those wild breaths that never slow.

Does it move the clouds
Like ghostly galleons?
Across a midnight's time?

Does it whisper waves
Or make a breeze?
And make hurricanes so high?

Does it cross a field of flowers?
Or a quaint, snow-filled valley?
How about soaring with the birds?
Making bells chime and defying gravity.

It breathes against my face
And puts a tempest in my hair
These winds can be rowdy
Where ever they may fly.

They are silent gondoliers
That paddle in the light
When mad they create tornadoes
And many times can make a baby cry.

Where does the wind blow?
After traveling there and far
Across the edge of the universe?
Or perhaps it simply goes off to die

But where do they go?
When their work is all done?
Oh, these free spirits of the sky
I’ve just always wanted to know.

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IcyFlame
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IcyFlame wrote a review Review · Aug 9, 2011

Hello! IcyFlame here with a review!
I'm loving the questions you pose throughout the poem, they're very thought provoking which I assume was the main purpose you had in mind? It's a good concept and you've paid attention to detail in the piece. You've used a good form and as a result it seems to flow well. I think your punctuation and grammer was just right , and I can't think of anything to change!
I feel this was a pretty useless review so I'm sorry!
Keep on typing!

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Demoness
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Demoness commented Comment · Aug 8, 2011

Hellie Hallou! My name.. or username or whatever, is Demoness and I'm here to inflict my comments on this piece.

I'll begin with saying.. INTERESTING topic! It really is a good question. Other than that it was also a good poem.
I like the structur and the piece flows very well. I like how you manage to keep good structure and keep up the rhyming without making it sound the least forced or even tense :) If there was one thing that could be improved it's the punctuation, you begin wonderfully but the further down I read the worse ít got ^^

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

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Demoness
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Demoness wrote a review Review · Aug 8, 2011

Hellie Hallou! My name.. or username or whatever, is Demoness and I'm here to inflict my comments on this piece.

I'll begin with saying.. INTERESTING topic! It really is a good question. Other than that it was also a good poem.
I like the structur and the piece flows very well. I like how you manage to keep good structure and keep up the rhyming without making it sound the least forced or even tense :) If there was one thing that could be improved it's the punctuation, you begin wonderfully but the further down I read the worse ít got ^^

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

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W0lfbane
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W0lfbane commented Comment · Aug 8, 2011

Where does the wind blows? Everywhere! But that's a good poem you've written there =)

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ally1212
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ally1212 wrote a review Review · Aug 8, 2011

That was a really good poem. I liked how you thought of so many differnt things that have to do with the wind and how you compared it to differnt things. It was also good how you stared the beginging with wondering and ended it with wondering. The biging was a work of art I could tell that it was well thought out. The end was almost just as good which is hard to acheive so I congradulate you on a job well done! Hope all you other work is as good as this!



here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings