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I loved it! I know you already have a first chapter out so I'll try to get to it soon...in the meantime, *liked. If you keep writing, I'll keep reading. Your characters are already complex and realistic to me, and I can feel the gravity of the situation that just kept pulling me through the words and making me read more.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver
This is very interesting and brilliantly written. I loved your word choice, especially when describing the surroundings, it immediately brings images to the mind, rather than making the reader think up vague ideas or simply cause them to be lost. I'm very curious about the background story of this piece. The way you have written it is very vague but that's what makes it so interesting. Its mystery is its appeal. Great job on this piece. It was thoroughly enjoyable.
Wow. That was amazing! The descriptions flowed easily and the intro made me want more. However, I had a hard time following some of what had happened, for example when you suddenly threw in Naomi. I would also like to know who "I" is. Other than that I would gladly read more of your writing!
That. Was. Amazing. Wow. Good job. I'm 'bout ready to cry now. Beautiful, sad, descriptive, amazing. Gah, wish I could write like that. I don't think I see anything wrong with it, in any way. I would like to know who 'I' is. I want to know what happens next. And Nightshade seems pretty appropriate. Can't wait to read more.