Young Writers Society

Wow! Text messages in form of poetry. Unique piece of work. Reading the little I thought I'm going to read about happiness, Clever way of handling the words, I was into surprise turn of events.
Realistic story with emotions, you made it sound more human.
The authenticity is what I loved in this work.
The longing does not go away no matter what. When we fall into the pit called Love, there is no climbing up to breathe new air. So intense, right?
This poem voiced the plight of the heartbroken lover and the another who has a heart of a steel.
Sometimes we don't let people go that easy even if our mouth says it the heart says otherwise.
This poem made me think a lot. Quite a piece!
Loved it!
Hope to see more of your works.
Keep up the writing!
~ Wordzyy

I agree with Bhavya. This is heartbreaking. I'm assuming this was a very possessive and toxic relationship. But still, I can't believe someone would be that self-centered. I also see the possessiveness and manipulation that ignites by the words "happier." The right side uses it to try to win back the left. And it seems to work because the left gets drunk and admits they're not over the right. And just how cruel the end is.

"who is this?"

The right side I hope rots.

So, good job. You really know how to play with the mood.

- Shay

Hi! I actually don't know what to say. What I read just now, left me heartbroken. How can someone be like that? But I want to write a review to tell you that please don't lose hope. Better days will come. As far as, writing is concerned I think you did a wonderful job. The rhyming was on point. The emotions were perfectly conveyed.
I hope you are feeling lighter and better after pouring your emotions.
All the best for your future works and Keep Writing!<3
From: Bhavya

I don't really know what to say..
I deeply hate how we can begin and end a relationship by sending a message, especially love.. I mean love is more than any ordinary relationship, more than the mouth can say and the mind can think. whatever
I like your writing, it contains some of the bad reality of how we deal with things in life.
waiting your next work

I don't know what to say.. Each line made me stop to think for at least half a minute and it brings me memories and then Kara stopped texting back. It took me till the end to realize that. Also, somehow, I could imagine the years passing by with each text sent. It was in the end that I just lost it. I don't think anything else has had that kind of an impact on me.

I just want to say that the feeling really comes through with this one and its beautiful and amazing and I love it. I don't know what to call this and maybe that's a good thing because its too good to be called anything. Please keep writing. The entire theme is very relatable. Somehow, the entire piece revolved around the idea present in the last line.

who is this?