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by steward

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

I know you're happier now

Why can't you just be glad that I'm not trying to kill myself every 5 minutes?

It seems you're happier without me

I told you, I've learned to be happy so if you can't be happy for me then fuck

It took me trying to kill myself and being forced to get help

None of this is because of you

I don't even know what to say anymore

None of your happiness is because of me? Really, fuck you

You know what, think whatever you want. I'm done

All you wanted to do was stick your dick inside me, so congrats, you can be done with me

I fucking loved you, but think what you want

I'm done




Hey Kara

It's been a while, I just wanted to say hi

I know I'm the last person you want to hear it from, but happy birthday


Hey, how are you?

Happy birthday Kara, hope you're doing well

Merry Christmas Kara, hope everything's going good. 

I just got back to town, but I was wondering if you're in town to grab coffee or something?

Happy birthday :)

Fuck i got drunkk and all i coul think about was u,, shhit

Holy shit, I'm so sorry about that, please ignore it

Happy birthday, crazy that your 21 now haha, has it been that long?


I saw your post and I just wanted to say congrats. You're going to be a great mom :)

Happy birthday Kara :) also, your baby is gorgeous haha

Happy birthday :)

Happy birthday

Happy birthday!

Hey, I just saw pictures of you in the hospital. Is everything okay?

Happy birthday. I don't know why I still text

I never stopped loving you. I hope you know that

I miss you so much

I know you're happier now

who is this?

Is this a review?



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94 Reviews

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Reviews: 94

Sat May 30, 2020 1:27 pm
Wordzyy wrote a review...

Wow! Text messages in form of poetry. Unique piece of work. Reading the little I thought I'm going to read about happiness, Clever way of handling the words, I was into surprise turn of events.
Realistic story with emotions, you made it sound more human.
The authenticity is what I loved in this work.
The longing does not go away no matter what. When we fall into the pit called Love, there is no climbing up to breathe new air. So intense, right?
This poem voiced the plight of the heartbroken lover and the another who has a heart of a steel.
Sometimes we don't let people go that easy even if our mouth says it the heart says otherwise.
This poem made me think a lot. Quite a piece!
Loved it!
Hope to see more of your works.
Keep up the writing!
~ Wordzyy :)

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Fri Apr 24, 2020 11:27 pm
shayspeare wrote a review...

I agree with Bhavya. This is heartbreaking. I'm assuming this was a very possessive and toxic relationship. But still, I can't believe someone would be that self-centered. I also see the possessiveness and manipulation that ignites by the words "happier." The right side uses it to try to win back the left. And it seems to work because the left gets drunk and admits they're not over the right. And just how cruel the end is.

"who is this?"

The right side I hope rots.

So, good job. You really know how to play with the mood.

- Shay

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Fri Apr 24, 2020 11:24 am
BhavyaMehta123 wrote a review...

Hi! I actually don't know what to say. What I read just now, left me heartbroken. How can someone be like that? But I want to write a review to tell you that please don't lose hope. Better days will come. As far as, writing is concerned I think you did a wonderful job. The rhyming was on point. The emotions were perfectly conveyed.
I hope you are feeling lighter and better after pouring your emotions.
All the best for your future works and Keep Writing!<3
From: Bhavya

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Fri Apr 24, 2020 11:07 am
diphylleia wrote a review...

I don't really know what to say..
I deeply hate how we can begin and end a relationship by sending a message, especially love.. I mean love is more than any ordinary relationship, more than the mouth can say and the mind can think. whatever
I like your writing, it contains some of the bad reality of how we deal with things in life.
waiting your next work :)

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Fri Apr 24, 2020 8:22 am
mythh wrote a review...

I don't know what to say.. Each line made me stop to think for at least half a minute and it brings me memories and then Kara stopped texting back. It took me till the end to realize that. Also, somehow, I could imagine the years passing by with each text sent. It was in the end that I just lost it. I don't think anything else has had that kind of an impact on me.

I just want to say that the feeling really comes through with this one and its beautiful and amazing and I love it. I don't know what to call this and maybe that's a good thing because its too good to be called anything. Please keep writing. The entire theme is very relatable. Somehow, the entire piece revolved around the idea present in the last line.

who is this?

This was due to the constant change of pace of time. The time it took to forget. On one side time seems to pass really quick and on the more damaged side, each second feels like forever.

I hope you aren't actually feeling this way right now.

Much love, keep writing.

Yours sincerely,

"You, who have all the passion for life that I have not? You, who can love and hate with a violence impossible to me? Why you are as elemental as fire and wind and wild things..."
— Gone With the Wind