Written at 11:59 pm on December 31, 2015
The fireworks and noise began as I seemed to end.
It was such a long and draining year and I could no longer pretend.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes ago,
It was hard to keep living and so easy to let go.
That night I made a choice to give it another chance,
Although the blood and the tears kept my eyes on the circumstance.
I fought the thoughts of another year that would finally kill me;
All the pain, the hurt, and the suffering that life still could be.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes later,
My skin remained untouched but my life remained an agitator.
I ask myself "Should I keep living this life that's left me a mess?"
And even after all I've been through, I still hear myself say "oh hell yes."
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"The fireworks and noise began as I seemed to end.
It was such a long and draining year and I could no longer pretend.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes ago,
It was hard to keep living and so easy to let go.
That night I made a choice to give it another chance,
Although the blood and the tears kept my eyes on the circumstance.
I fought the thoughts of another year that would finally kill me;
All the pain, the hurt, and the suffering that life still could be.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes later,
My skin remained untouched but my life remained an agitator.
I ask myself "Should I keep living this life that's left me a mess?"
And even after all I've been through, I still hear myself say "oh hell yes.'"
The whole this was amazing you should have extended it and made it longer than it is
I loved it so much!!!!
I loved the name more than anything else, I copied my other stuff so it looks cooler!
because I am lame.
"The fireworks and noise began as I seemed to end.
It was such a long and draining year and I could no longer pretend.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes ago,
It was hard to keep living and so easy to let go.
That night I made a choice to give it another chance,
Although the blood and the tears kept my eyes on the circumstance.
I fought the thoughts of another year that would finally kill me;
All the pain, the hurt, and the suffering that life still could be.
364 days, 23 hours, and 59 minutes later,
My skin remained untouched but my life remained an agitator.
I ask myself "Should I keep living this life that's left me a mess?"
And even after all I've been through, I still hear myself say "oh hell yes.'"
The whole this was amazing you should have extended it and made it longer than it is
I loved it so much!!!!
Hey there! Coehl here!
I just want to say that this is a very gorgeous and touching poem and I feel like it's a bit more "realistic" and a tad way more personal than I'd expected to see with the poems I've read and seen on here.
I definitely love how you tied the New Years tradition to the narrator's feelings and their train of thought, for me it's much more than just renewing a year, it's renewing the thought of having to live a life as a human being when I read this.
Personally I definitely felt the person's struggles even though this poem isn't as exaggerated as many more out there.
You did a lovely job with this work, and I hope to see you write some more poems!!! <33
I totally agree! I am going to share this poem with my freinds.
I love this. It's great. I think my favorite part is how relatable it is. You didn't throw in necessarily what your experiences were, or why the previous year caused you to feel as if your life is a mess. You gave just enough information to allow this poem emotional depth while leaving room for others to relate. You have a real gift for writing, and although this appears to be pulled from personal experience, you could definitely throw this into a novel. Happy writing
Dam son where'd ya find this.
Steward, this was wonderful. <3
Wow...this is really amazing. This title is going to be ringing in my ears for years to come... This is so beautiful and inspiring! This new year will undoubtedly bring hardships but it's things like this poem that help pull us through, and for this I thank you. Don't ever let go! Keep writing because you're really talented!
This is an inspiration, honestly. It really captures the struggle that some people go through over the years, but keep holding on. Excellent! >w< Never give up~