Dying Mother Earth

Hello, Rain here. I liked this, it was short and simple, the main problem I found was that it has no set structure. I think if you have a set structure it would flow better and be a lot easier to read.

I also think that the you should stick with the rhyme throughout the poem.

Ok, so, here is what I have to say. ( I really didn't read the other reviews so if I repeat what they say, I'm sorry)
Red- Grammer mistakes
Blue- Things I think you should change to make the poem better, in my opinion, or from my expereance.
Pink/purple- Things I really like
Green- Aditional comments

We burn the forests and kill the trees.
We force the earth upon her knees. << I simply adore these two lines!

Ruling the earth with an iron fist,
defiance flashes across Earth’s lips. << So, to make this rhyme I suggest you change this word. I think the first line is a good solid line. But if you prefer the second line to stay the same, change the last word of the fist line.

She fights back with storm and rage,
tsunamis, floods and hurricanes. <<Now here, "rage" and "hurricanes" some what rhyme. I think you could keep this the way itbut if you think you could find away to make it rhyme completly then that would be good as well. Either way seems good to me.

The sky burns, deep red streaks.
All living things grow weak.<< I think you should change this line (still keep it in the poem, just in the next stanza. I think you should explain more the "red streaks" that are in the sky. Then start the next stanza with this line.

All living things grow weak.
Here I would make add another line. Something about the weakening things. I say this because I love the next line, and to stay with the structure and the rhyme you would need to change "trash" so simply adding another line to this and carrying "The ocean sifts around all the trash." to be the first line in the next stanza, it works.

The ocean sifts around all the trash.
Add another line her that rhymes with trash.

Pain and death plague the lives of all,
everyone cries for the Earth to revive. << Now just make this rhyme and your good!

A very good poem indeed!!!! great descriptive, shows that you care about our world and what we have done to it. relating to the fact of real events, proves handy to your poem. im looking forward to see more!

Greetings from the southern heat, Snicker! I just read through this poem of yours a couple of times and I must say that it has great potential! Now, as a reviewer, it's my job to make that potential shine brighter than Vegas in July. That said, understand that there's a lot of work that needs to go into this because, frankly, I want this to emanate significance. So, to get right down to the meat of the poem:

We burn the forests and kill the trees.
We force the earth upon her knees.
Ruling the earth with an iron fist, defiance flashes across Earth’s lips.
She fights back with storm and rage, tsunamis, floods and hurricanes.

We burn the forests and kill the trees.
We force the earth upon her knees.
Ruling the earth with an iron fist,
defiance flashes across Earth’s lips.
She fights back with storm and rage,
tsunamis, floods and hurricanes.

The sky burns in deep red streaks.
All living things are growing weak.
The ocean sifts around all the trash.
Pain and death plague the lives of all; This line is just weak and sounds weird to me. Total replacement should do the trick, but stick with the same idea of pain and death and all that jazz.
everyone cries for the Earth to revive. This line is also nasty as far as rhythm goes, but I love the way you phrased this (half-way). Cloak it a bit more and fix the rhythm. You should be able to follow the pattern from the beginning to end without a hiccup.
You need to insert two more lines at the end of this stanza to match length.