Dear Daddy,
I’m sorry Daddy. It’s my fault, you’re right. I know that now. I deserve my punishment.
I’m not pretty. I know that now. I’m sorry for asking for that Barbie doll. Only pretty little girls deserve Barbie dolls. I realize now that you’re right. I’m ugly. My eyes are weird. They’re a dirty mud brown. My freckles aren’t cute. They just make me uglier. My nose isn’t a button nose. It’s a squashed pig nose. I’m not pretty like the other little girls. I don’t deserve a Barbie. Thank you for showing me that Daddy.
I’m fat. So I don’t deserve nice clothes. I’m sorry Daddy. I eat too much. That’s why I don’t fit in clothes 4-5 like the other little girls. Thank you for making me stronger Daddy. You were right to shout at me when my stomach grumbled. I shouldn’t be hungry. I’m fat. My stomach doesn’t complain as much now Daddy. It’s getting use to no food. I’m sorry for being fat and ugly. I’m trying to be skinny.
I’m sorry for wanting a birthday party Daddy. I don’t know why anyone would want to be my friend. I’m fat and ugly and a bitch. Thank you for thumping that into me Daddy. I don’t deserve friends. Barney was just lying when he said that everyone deserved friends, and his "I love you" song is stupid. I don’t deserve to be loved or have friends. All the other little girls in my class are skinny and pretty. They have Barbie’s to prove it. They don’t wear size 5-6 clothes like I do. I’m sorry I’m not like them daddy. Thank you for burning my birthday cards. I’m sorry for upsetting you Daddy. I’ll try be better for next year.
I’m stupid. I still can’t say the whole alphabet. There’s obviously something wrong with me. Teacher's wrong. A little bit of extra help won’t help me. Daddy thinks that they should bring back in corporal punishment for stupid children like me. I think he’s right. I deserve a slap for getting something wrong. Thank you for showing me that Daddy. I’m sorry I’m not smart.
I’m so clumsy. I fall down the stairs. I burn myself. Things fall on my head. I slip on glass. It’s my fault. I’m sorry for being so clumsy Daddy. It makes a racket and a mess. I’ll stay quiet if the hospital says anything. They don’t know what they’re talking about. You’d only ever hit me if it was my fault. It’s always my fault. You only do this to me because you love me.
I’ve one last thing to be sorry for Daddy. I’m sorry for not being strong like you Daddy. I couldn’t survive you. I was getting stronger though! When I was two or three I might of cried when you hit me. But I’ve learnt that you don’t like that. Its weak. So now that I’m four I don’t cry as much Daddy. I can’t cry anymore. I fell down the stairs the other night and I forgot to wake up.
I’m sorry for upsetting you Daddy.
Love you Daddy
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wow, this is deep and meaningful I love the last line 'I forgot to wake up'
...I want to cry.
awe Im sorry! I cried while writing it too!
I have no words. This is amazing.
thank you
This truly brought tears to my eyes. It's so emotional and deep. It's saddening how in some cases, this is true, and it breaks my heart. And all of the grammatical and whatnot errors make sense, since supposedly this was supposed to be written by a four year old. I love this, but I also hate it at the same time since it's so tragic.
awe thank you
Wow, this is a really depressing and emotional piece, and it was written very well. This is the type of piece that should touch anyone who reads it.
There are just a few grammar & spelling mistakes.that you could fix to make the piece even more pollished:
The first two times you put the word "Daddy" as capitalized and for the rest of it you lowercased it, so I would change it to be consistent.
I think you need a comma after "so" in : "So I don’t deserve nice clothes." In this sentence you could have a "d" at the end of "use" : "t’s getting use to no food" although the way it is, it sounds like how a little child might say "use" instead of "used" so it really makes sense whether or not you change it.
This sentence maybe should be split into two sentences or add the word and instead of the comma. :"All the other little girls in my class are skinny and pretty, they have Barbie’s to prove it."
In the 3rd paragraph you put the phrase "I"m sorry" twice in a row, which might have been intentional or a typo, I think if it's intentional, then you should put a comma so that it's "I'm sorry, I'm sorry". This should possibly have an apostraphe : "Teachers wrong"
In the secound to last paragraph you missed the "s" in "if the hospital says anything. Lastly in the last paragraph it should be "learned" instead of "learnt" And it should be "it's weak" with an apostraphe "s".
Thank you for posting this powerful piece, keep writing! Have a good day,
~Alliyah.
thank you! I went through it and I think I got everything! thanks again!
Again this is a great piece, you missed the capital d for Daddy in the 3rd paragraph, "I'm sorry I'm not like them daddy".
So much thought has been put into this.
I hope it's not true.
This is certainly a great peice of work, and you've really expressed your true meaning here, sharing it with the world.
There are a few mistakes with some of the sentances.
I think you know where.
This is really good, and descriptive, but also, it's emotional.
I actually nearly cryed.
Keep it up though!
It didnt happen to me anyway!!
Thank you! Will do!
D: Oh my God. Darling, you just made me cry. Congratulations on a fantastic, moving piece of literature. I've never read anything on here that made me sob. Never.
D,:
There were a few typos, so you might want to edit, because this truly fantastic piece of writing should be perfect. If you need it, I'll help you edit when I'm not so sad D:
shoot me a PM if you need help!
~Drama
Thank you! At least its made the impact I hoped it would!
Yeah I'd love you to help me edit, that would be great! And thank you for your review!!