Think you play me like
a game?
Got a mind like a
puzzle.
And I am just your little pawn,
but darling, how you've got it wrong.
Don't you see the lights,
shining?
All the cameras point
at you.
It's all just part of my big show
and you're the main attraction.
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Hey there! How are you, today? Purple here to give you a review! Let's get started
This was a pretty interesting read. It seemed a little scatter-brained at some points, or maybe you know exactly what it means but some doesn't quite fit with the rest. For example, if in the first stanza you're saying the other person cannot play you like a game because YOUR mind is like a puzzle, then how are you a pawn? Unless you mean the other person has a mind like a puzzle. Also, "but darling, how you've for it wrong." has a strong personal voice but doesn't fit in with the general vagueness and unrequited love in the rest of the poem. Other than that it's a lovely piece. I hope this was helpful! Have a wonderful day!
~Purple
Hey, I'm good, you? yeah, those first few were referring to the ideas of the subject, so his mind was "like a puzzle". I might try to find a way to make that more clear, but it has a meter, so that might be hard. And I know the "darling" seems endearing, but I'm from the south so I tend to use terms of endearment sarcastically
. Thank you for reviewing 
I'm decent, haha. And yes I noticed the meter! It's really a good skill to have.
That's good. Thanks, it definitely takes some patience at the very least.
your poem is extremely good. i love how you used your words to tell the story, you painted a picture. your hint of sarcasm is not too much' but it is present. i truly feel bad for who this poem is about to make you feel this strongly.
Hey, this is great! The imagery and use of metaphors creates a great picture of what you're saying.
You also have a vivid voice speaking throughout, which give this poem life, so kudos.
The ending is great because I wasn't expecting it to be so blunt. It "turns the table" so to speak, and leaves me, the reader, with a lot to think about. You, the narrator, become a sort of controversial figure in this because now I don't really know what your motives are, I just know that the person you are addressing is the vulnerable one, not you. It's so intriguing!
Again, great work and happy writing.
-Briggsy