Young Writers Society

This is an amazing poem. The unique use of the formatting and fonts gives us a look into the mind of the writer. With the neat writing at first that slowly gets messier as they talk about their mind while folding the towels, is a very unique twist. At some points, it got a bit confusing to read, but it was perfect for the topic of the poem.

Keep up the good work!

This poem powerfully captures the struggle of dealing with mental chaos through a ritualistic and seemingly mundane activity—folding towels. The repetition and meticulousness of the folding process reflect a desperate attempt to find order and control amidst inner turmoil. Each step represents a coping mechanism, as if organizing physical items might calm the mind's chaos.

The visual structure of the poem, with words and phrases scattered and fragmented across the page, mimics the messiness of the speaker’s thoughts. This layout effectively portrays how, despite attempts at control, intrusive thoughts persist, represented by larger, distorted, or overlapping words like "POUNDING" and "clawing." These elements convey an intense, almost physical sensation of mental anguish and the relentlessness of these overwhelming thoughts.

The language is simple yet profound, especially with lines like “you cannot escape this. / you cannot be saved,” which convey a sense of despair. The phrase "my mind is a mess, so I will fold my towels" is both ironic and poignant, capturing how small, repetitive tasks can sometimes serve as anchors in times of mental struggle.

Overall, the poem is a raw, visceral representation of seeking calm within internal chaos, employing both language and visual formatting to immerse the reader in the speaker’s experience.

As someone who craves an escape from my problems, I find this poem beautiful; not in just the message but also the visual of the words breaking down. It's very unique in that way. The emotions represented by the formatting of the characters, I think, exacerbate your tone and the readers' mood. Ultimately, I could feel the character's mind degrading throughout the poem through the visuals which isn't something that happens often. Overall one of the better poems I have read.

Hey, coming in to review this magnificent poem!
This is so amazing--I’d go as far as to say it’s one of my favorite poems about this concept of all time. You’ve really captured the feeling of descending into madness, trying to anchor yourself to real life. Not only are the words perfect for this, the way you formatted it adds even more to the interest and the overall feeling of the poem.
One of my favorite parts of this piece on the first read were the randomly replaced letters in the beginning. I didn’t expect the formatting change at all, so on the first read I thought these were typos. It just adds to the realness of the whole thing. The spaces also added to the feeling of sinking deeper and deeper.
Although this is already a great poem, I feel like it could have more imagery added. Perhaps the surroundings closing in around the narrator, or the feeling of trying to anchor yourself. Maybe even a description of the towels. We got a bit of imagery with the pounding and clawing, and it was helped even more by the formatting--I just wanted more of that!
Overall, this piece is just incredibly creative. It represents that feeling so well, with all the components pieced together to make you feel like you’re living in the narrator’s head. I can’t wait to read more of your poetry!
<3, Meenal (theromanticchemist)

Woww it was so good you can feel the wheitage of grief in your words the example you explained of folding towels is new to me and it is so unique to tell the process of folding towels in your poem the misery is easy to understand and for a new beginner like me it was easy to understand yet in so much depth. Moreover the pattern below was also very good and unique