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Hi and hello! Wow, this poem REALLY leaves the reader with something... The format is absolutely amazing. It's unique and therefore memorable!
I love how the poem starts with "I have a confession to make". It makes us feel close with the author, like we are a part of each other's lifes. Then the author goes on about how they forgot to take care of themselves and all they do is grieve. It's really relatable so it will stay in my mind for a while.
Then the author transforms their thoughts into auto-aggression, even cursing themselves. But at the same time they carve to break the curse. But can they do that? Can we really ALONE fight for a better tomorrow? That's a great question.
Thank you for this poem, it's amazing!
Hello! It's catsz here to leave a review! The title is eye catching, let's dive in!
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it hits really hard, and triggers a wave of curiosity and it is very intriguing.
the fact that it is in lowercase gives a feeling of "ready to let go, ready to tell the world about me".
I love the rhyming every two lines. It is consistent, and the vocabulary just doubles the greatness.
The structure is very creative.
The feelings the narrator's voice gives me inside my mind is chilling. The panic, the sadness, the loneliness, and the desperation.
Imagery is flashing in my brain as I read, and the narrator's voice makes it sound like a movie.
atlas and sisyphus, very creative names, and I love the comparison.
The emotions that threaten to overwhelm us and take control is clearly stated.
I don't have any good suggestions...
but maybe at the end, you can write
personally i think it would hit harder, and has more emotion, a trail of thought, like a whisper.
Of course, this is your poem, and it is like sooooo good already, so do what feels right to your style!!!
I loved reading this, thank you so much for writing!
Happy Reviewing, Happy Writing!
from mission world cat domination society,
~catsz (and her ragdoll)
Hi! This is an excellent poem! I love the rhyme scheme and the formatting of this. I also really appreciate the Greek mythology reference at the end, because I absolutely love Greek mythology. But the imagery created in the poem is excellent, and I felt so many emotions while reading this. I also love the ending, because I love a good rhetorical question. You should be really proud of yourself for writing this, because it is wonderful. I'll stop now before I start waffling. Keep up your great work!
Hi! Great work. Love the assembly of the text I was wondering if the shift in shape at the end was also on purpose?
.A theme of sorrow and wish to escape but without the ability (opportunity?) to do so.
You seem to follow a end-rhyming couplet form but you also drop this off at the end, I'm assuming on purpose.
The couplet however seems to bring about a bit of an awkward sentence in
The sentence brings about the expectation of the more familiar "between a rock and a hard place", and comes off a bit awkward, while the earlier rhymes seem more naturally placed.
Otherwise I think this is a solid piece of poetry. Great work.
hi there! thank you for your review. yes, the shift was intentional. the reference of atlas and sisyphus at the end of the poem with the first 95% of it stacked on top of it is supposed to reference their fates. this was also my first ever attempt at a rhyming poem, i do a lot of free verse work. i didn%u2019t want my rhyming to be like anyone else%u2019s, so it purposely has a sense of being off-kilter and broken. the one thing i was worried about was it sounding too dr. seuss-like with the rhyming, though.