I have seen a rose wilted by anger,
With dry petals that under heavy breath
Shiver and shake with furious danger.
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Her thorns are daggers wielded by Macbeth--
They usher passionate revenge; never
Will she grasp the finality of death.
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She burns red in the hot summer weather,
But if you enter her garden bower,
You’ll find her silenced heart, bound and tethered.
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I read these passions--this hunt for power--
In vain fae and young blossoms; they anchor
Deep down, growing sicker by the hour.
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To this intenseness, I am no stranger,
I have been a rose wilted by anger
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a poem with feels!
I like the metaphoric nature of your work and it is really admirable, your choice of words. the intensity of the words doesn't get lost on the readers, and that's the best thing I like about your poem. the first line really struck me, you know? makes one think! likewise, the first stanza is my favorite as well. you sure have lots of potentials, keep up the good work.
hey there !
I am Diphylleia, and I wish you are fine.
I loved your poem and your writing style. a lot of feelings are hidden behind every word.
That's interesting how you see and describe things, how you made your self as a rose, and how you are wilted be anger. In my opinion, I see that anger is the reason of the most of problems. sadly I can't control mine hehe.
I like the most those lines
" She burns red in the hot summer weather,
But if you enter her garden bower,
You’ll find her silenced heart, bound and tethered. "
I find them so warm, and when I read them I feel naked from my pretending.
Thank you for sharing it with us. I will be waiting for your next writing darling!
hey there !
I am Diphylleia, and I wish you are fine.
I loved your poem and your writing style. a lot of feelings are hidden behind every word.
That's interesting how you see and describe things, how you made your self as a rose, and how you are wilted be anger. In my opinion, I see that anger is the reason of the most of problems. sadly I can't control mine hehe.
I like the most those lines
" She burns red in the hot summer weather,
But if you enter her garden bower,
You’ll find her silenced heart, bound and tethered. "
I find them so warm, and when I read them I feel naked from my pretending.
Thank you for sharing it with us. I will be waiting for your next writing darling!
Hey Quitecontrary! Sofie here with a review
Wow. I really love this piece. I think the metaphor of the wilting rose is such a brilliant idea and makes for really beautiful poetry. Two lines in particular really stuck out to me. The first one was;
"But if you enter her garden bower,
You’ll find her silenced heart, bound and tethered:
I just that the line was really interesting, and I think we can all relate to feeling "bound and tethered" at some point in our lives.
The second line was;
"They usher passionate revenge; never
Will she grasp the finality of death."
That line stuck out to me as well. I just thought it was really beautifully written and puts into words something we all go through in life.
All in all, you did a really great job on this piece! I thought it was really moving and the metaphor was so brilliant. Keep writing and keep practicing.
Sofia