People stare,
as if they expect something.
But what do I do?
Is that very fair?
~
My heart has been pulled in ways
that make me hurt
Ideas are forced at me
That I cant insert
~
I rarely have an opinion,
So why should people care?
Its like I have been caught
In an invisible snare.
~
I am hidden in the background
trying to put together the fragments
trying to forget
the internal harassments
~
Nobody knows
and nobody will see
whats actually happening
the mysteries of me
*Dedicated to my mysteries*
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Hi, BrokenHeartsAri here for a short review!!
Ok I going to ahead and say this I LOVE your poems they are so true and truly are relatable
¨I am hidden in the background
trying to put together the fragments
trying to forget
the internal harassments¨
it is like living your life in the background. you see and hear everything waiting for your turn to come out, but it comes to the point where you don't want to come out cause you're not done with the puzzle.
¨People stare,
as if they expect something.
But what do I do?
Is that very fair?¨
I love this because it fits so well to start this poem off.
¨Nobody knows
and nobody will see
what's actually happening
the mysteries of me¨
this was a great poem
keep up the good work!!~BrokenHeartsAri
Hi, nightshadows!
I really liked this poem. I liked how you made only the second and fourth lines rhyme. It gave it a bit of consistency so it wasn't choppy.
The creativity was great too. You illuminated hiding things away. You showed what it is like to put on a brave face-a mask if you will- and pretend it is all okay. I loved the metaphor of the "invisible snare". It made the reader better understand feeling like this.
Overall, awesome job! Keep up the great work!
Signed,
Pineapple 🍍
Thank you!!