Young Writers Society

Hi, BrokenHeartsAri here for a short review!!



Ok I going to ahead and say this I LOVE your poems they are so true and truly are relatable



¨I am hidden in the background

trying to put together the fragments

trying to forget

the internal harassments¨

it is like living your life in the background. you see and hear everything waiting for your turn to come out, but it comes to the point where you don't want to come out cause you're not done with the puzzle.


¨People stare,

as if they expect something.

But what do I do?

Is that very fair?¨




I love this because it fits so well to start this poem off.


¨Nobody knows

and nobody will see

what's actually happening

the mysteries of me¨

this was a great poem


keep up the good work!!~BrokenHeartsAri

Hi, nightshadows!

I really liked this poem. I liked how you made only the second and fourth lines rhyme. It gave it a bit of consistency so it wasn't choppy.

The creativity was great too. You illuminated hiding things away. You showed what it is like to put on a brave face-a mask if you will- and pretend it is all okay. I loved the metaphor of the "invisible snare". It made the reader better understand feeling like this.

Overall, awesome job! Keep up the great work!

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